TheCalm_One

I love that you are actually putting in the efforts of detailing the surroundings rather than just slamming a scenario to the reader's face. Most webnovels don't do this.

oh ok

Hey author, you changed your discord server? because the one mentioned in the synopsis doesn't work.

Author, have some integrity and decide your novel's path. You have already changed it more than 3 times. I am here thinking why a novel is changing cover art and chapters everytime I accidently see it and read it

it's natural, characters you create become a part of you and reside in your sub consciousness which influence your other works without you even noticing

This is more like kiaran and his nephew( i Dont remember his name, sorry) from your previous novel. I dont know why I feel like it but whatever.🙃

childs........ Filthy Rookie Mistake

Bro your writing and story is fine but god damn bro chill out, the story feels rushed not in the lore sense but how you are explaining the scenes. Take your time to transition between different scenes, explain the environment more, give more explanation about what goes inside the mind of the mc, detail the smell and aura of the surroundings, increase word count and give yourself and us time to breathe

Took you long enough! You did reflect on some of my past points but I still think that you are only focusing on the characters and the environment surrounding them is lifeless. Try to explain the place where the characters are. If you want an example, you can read any page of lord of the mysteries and see how cuttlefish makes the environment more alive by adding background characters yelling in bars and local places, explaining the environment, air, forest, inns etc. Though I don't expect it to be on the same level as Cuttlefish, just try at least. You had a great opportunity for it when the mc was riding in the carriage but you missed it. This imagery is very important for a full fleshed novel.

Nah! I just have spend a lot of time reading and have finished many novels like lord of the mysteries, trash of the counts family etc. These types of things come naturally at that point.