Very interesting start to a story! I think the outline and the first chapter have a very interesting and unique concept. I was a bit distracted by some interpunction and grammar inconsistencies, but if the author fixes those, you'll have a very compelling read. Keep it up!

Thank you so much <3

The first chapter beautifully describes the scenery of the story and immediately makes me curious to continue reading about this elaborate fantasy. Good job author!

A very interesting beginning for the story! The author does a good job portraying the world and conflict of the main character from the beginning. There are a few language mistakes, but they're not distracting. Continue the good work!

Hiya, this is the author: Feline or FelinaBina! I'm very happy that you decided to read this. Writing is a beautiful way to get lost in your own imagination, but it gets even more exciting when one is offered the possibility to share their work with others. Please also chek out my other work: With Ignis.

Hiya, this is the author: Feline or FelinaBina! I'm very happy that you decided to read this. Writing is a beautiful way to get lost in your own imagination, but it gets even more exciting when one is offered the possibility to share their work with others. Please also chek out my other work: Peacocks and Swans.

Thank you!!