Kaazy

Youve made me obsessed with your novel. Damn you!

Maybe add a last name? More character development?

Delete the Sei.

I know you have a lot of question, but now is not the time. ~I believe would sound much more endangering and cause more interest.

I recommend rewording this paragraph.. It makes the humanoid speech sound like a child which I don’t believe that’s what youre aiming for.

I recommend changing how was to how is. It’ll read more smoothly. Sorry I’ll be posting these comments throughout, once I get my power stones tonight I’ll send them your way. 🤙

Change Best to Vest, so far the story is intriguing so keep up the good work. 👍

See this! I just gifted the story: Dragon

See this! I just gifted the story: Luxury car

Please release more chapters today, I need more to feel okay.