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Klillo1hコメントSome people are simply born different from others and destined to be the protagonist, like Dumbledore or the Slytherin student who once won the Special Contribution Award. Wayne was gradually revealing similar traits.- Klillo2hコメントThough Hermione's hair was slightly disheveled, that was the only flaw. She was unquestionably the most adorable person ever, even without showing her teeth.
- Klillo22hコメントCh 44 Chp-43 Preparation for the Start.
- Klillo1dコメントCh 35 Ch: 35 Clones and Benefits.
- Klillo2dコメント
aint Long before he doesnt need Chubby man potion
"But master I made hot water for you. Why don't you get a quick bath while I make some Apple Tarte Tatin for you." - Klillo3dコメント
well Just for Logic or my misunderstanding. U cant decapitate/behead someone with an upward/vertical Slash If he doesnt lie on His side. Beheading while Standing only through a horizontal Slash. if i Just overread the anatomie of ergo then i apologize and U can ignore this.
With Ergo now vulnerable and incapacitated, Ichiro pressed his advantage. He followed up with an upward slash aimed at Ergo's head, the blade cleaving through the air with deadly precision. The strike was devastatingly effective, separating Ergo's head from his body in a swift and decisive motion. - Klillo4dコメントCh 43 Chp-42 Years Later..
- Klillo7dに返信 ZRUSQA
i understand that this fight is there to showcase the abilities o te shadows but considering that MC already foight so many shadows id rather advance with the Story and showcase their abilities in a shorter Form or Just dont and do IT at another fight with an Antagonist or Spirit. after all there already are Like 15chaps of shadows and him fighting.
Ch 50 Ch 45 Shikigami Conquest - Klillo7dに返信 ZRUSQA
No and yes. If you didnt Change your Style from the first fight, then there are too many thoughts. The MC is thinking too much and that makes the Fight feel slow and unrealistic. Tbh its very hard to write a 1st Person fight Cuz a fight is based on instincts and muscle memory (was a boxer) naturally you also think but you dont have that much time and Reading thought in a fight slows the Speed down. You See and react but your brain doesnt realize IT. That IS why i find the Fights boring. maybe If you want to try you try writing a fight in 3rd person in private or Just ready one and compare or Take a Look at some other 1st Person Fights. but dont think too much about IT. after all IT IS a Personal opinion and i dislike Long Fights that are unnecessaryly Long compared with the fighters strength.
Ch 50 Ch 45 Shikigami Conquest - Klillo7dコメントCh 21 21. Seat of Power
- Klillo8dコメント
normally i wouldve written "tftc" but i didnt ready IT Cuz after the First fight in this novel was Just Not to my liking. too slow and unnecessary Long. too many thought Processes. and from all those chapter titles i think that this didnt Change. except for the Fights the novel is nice
Ch 50 Ch 45 Shikigami Conquest - Klillo8dコメントCh 42 Chp-41 First Step Completed.
- Klillo9dに返信 AzagalPlayCh 12 The Big Fight/Aftermath
- Klillo10dコメントCh 9 Party Antics (Mental Planning)