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Are you using an app like grammary? Copy a draft of your writings to that, then sort though the errors it prompts you with. That should solve like 80% of the issues your chapters are having.
This really needs an edit. The grammar and choice of words are poor in many of the sentences; an example is when mentioning the events of using a "chopper" to get to a "port." Grammar aside, helicopter and harbor for the choice words would fit better when describing events occurring instead of slang words like chopper. First impressions are important.
something else do all wraiths have this system and access to this store?
still think because it's a form of energy and seems to be maybe related to his soul there should be a way to prevent excess loss of that energy. That ultimately its a matter of control of that energy which he currently doesn't possess. These packs would be best suited in emergency cases to recover what was lost. which could affect his strength for having that portion of energy missing.
should of gone by stage he's in. 3rd order should need a 3rd order med pack and so on. As he gets stronger would imagine he would be made up of a denser or higher quality eldritch energy. Meaning what would be needed to heal him would be more demanding as he gets stronger. Who knows maybe once he hits the 4th order the cost will increase just something to think about.
not going to lie this could pass for a short haired girl in an anime lol, very feminine.
so multiple reincanations in the same body, young master trope, child hood friend being guided by a spirit in her head, someone else having a legendary sword, useless elders with a father that abandoned his family. Forced engagement that causes issues. Did I miss anything like come on this is just a gag at this point.
appreciate the thought being put into the plot curious to see if these events will have a effect on Noah's character. Be a waste to put this effort into a flashback for a dead character.
yup hope hope this is the last of this cliche but some how I doubt it.