FantasyBliss30
Love to read and write fantasy, and give wings to my imagination.
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FantasyBliss301yrに返信 prokingI was just looking for a simile to a great golden palace, and beast came to mind. Let me know if you can think of something else. Haha.
The city's streets were straight as an arrow and smooth as a breeze. The two men took a sharp left turn, and at the very end of the street, Sachi saw the palace of the king of OneRealm, Asura Digvi. It was a magnificent golden beast, sprawling for acres, with another acre of palace ground contained in its walls.- FantasyBliss301yrに返信 prokingCh 2 The Mystic Capital [Sachi]
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Hahahaha, that's my favorite song!
Children giggled and chased after a mimic who had dressed as the divine lord Shiva waving his trident in one hand and rocking his kettle drum in the other. A small group of human scholars crossed the street, arguing heatedly about a passage from a scripture. In the courtyard of a temple, beautiful apsaras danced to the heavenly music of their husbands, the gandharvas. An audience of gods looked on and showered praises on the performers. - FantasyBliss301yrに返信 CrimsonImbricationCh 1 Prologue 1: God And The Asura
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This is a classic Vampire love story. Great read so far. Two things stood out to me: 1. Cliffhangers and shock twists. Author is really good at subversions. And the story is a real page turner. 2. Detailed world building and lores. It is a mixture of vampirism and wizardry. On to the story development, pacing is great and you won't get bored. Author keeps the readers on their toes. Updates are stable. Characters (MC and ML especially) are quirky and congruent to the story itself. Too early for character growth but I am sure it will happen as story progresses. Writing quality is pretty good, although there are a few typos and grammar errors, it doesn't compromise the flow of the story. Overall, a great read, esp. if you have a penchant for vampire stories. Awesome job, Author. Please keep writing! :D
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I thought vampires preferred virgin's blood. But I may be wrong. Really nice lores and world building btw.
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Uh oh
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Oof tough ending
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Love the shock chapter ending. Nice!
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I am, too.
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this is a confusing sentence. May be reword?
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Tears rolled down her cheeks....?
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Tabitha bent down to pick up....?
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haha good point
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Great start! May I make a quick suggestion if you don't mind; just a reframing of the events. :) "Hera..." The voice startled Asherah and the steel knife fell from her hand to the floor.
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Porcupine is an accurate imagery haha
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Usage of your own special fantasy words like Upheaval is excellent.
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I am right there in the battlefield. This is such a great description.
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