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Us women did not. The only roles they served were strictly non combat. Yes they flew planes, but in auxiliary roles. As support not in combat.
Way way too extra.
They weren't in combat roles.
Very obvious ai generated trash. The writing style is plagued by repetitive content, and useless chapters and the age old case of telling instead of showing. Almost everything up to chapter 25 is told from past tense view of the MC and it really sucks. We are never actually in the moment with the Mc... Ever. Furthermore many chapters are just repeats of the previous ones reworded. Or paragraphs are a reworded repetition of the previous paragraph. Its an obvious tell that the author is using an ai to write the majority of the story and isn't doing anything to proffread whatever they paste into the story that the ai wrote. With the small chapter size and use of ai combined with the respective nature. Some chapter updates are completely worthless. The story moves far too slow as well, never focusing on details that would matter, or doing any actual character building with anyone outside the MC himself. The MC himself is very bland and logical. There is nothing exciting about them at all really. Lastly, plot holes and contrivances abound, aren't addressed, and are glossed over like they don't exist.
Show don't tell. This is all just recaps of things that have happened. The reader isn't in the moment with the MC but rather this reads like a recounting of what happened. You need to SHOW the readers what is happening with word, rather than telling them what happened. This reads like it's nearly entirely ai generated with just some guidance given . It's pretty bad.
You didn't even write this ai generated repetitive crap. You just pasted it into the text box twice and didn't fix your mistake.
A ton of ai repetions in this. Stop using ai.
The state or village in this sense only gets the property when nobody is alive to manage it. This is problem with many fanfics, making it "somehow" they are orphans with no family at all. no grandparents, no civilian aunts or uncles. Not even a cousin? It ends up being far too contrived.
The ai is showing. Too much "precision, and determination" being repeated. It's very obvious.
The no sex while pregnant thing is so weird and makes no sense.