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I love DC Comics and I write as a hobby.
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CyAmze1yrコメントHi, Silas.
Victor's dad: Since you are together, we can tell you that you can't leave this lab for a while- CyAmze1yrに返信 ZAHAK
Again sorry for the late reply, I going to take it you haven't read the first book from your confusion to the name Atchaco. As the title suggests this is a Flash x OC type fic. Atchaco means that she is not wearing her super suit (if she is she is called Macanese as I previously said), it is a made up name.
Later at a power plant, Barry was taking clues. Atchaco was doing the same thing, but they hardly spoke or looked at each other. But it was mostly Barry that didn't acknowledge her presence, Atchaco sometimes took quick glances at Barry. "How's it going?" Joe questioned. - CyAmze1yrに返信 ZAHAK
Sorry for the late reply, the name Macanese just means Atchaco is in her superhero suit. Atchaco being the OC in this fic. If you haven't read the first fic then I suggest you do, it would mean it makes more sense.
Suddenly, as he was going to fire his cold gun, he gets thrown to the ground by a fireball and Firestorm appears in the sky. Barry walks up to Snart and destroys his cold gun. "We were late again, weren't we?" Macanese asks. - CyAmze2yrコメント
Nce opening paragraph. You know how to keep the reader attached.
A spaceship silently appeared in an abandoned construction site in the southern suburbs of Beijing. A few minutes later, the spaceship vanished into the night quietly as though it didn't even appear. - CyAmze2yrコメント
I think that was very good, draws the reader in making them want more, very good job.
この本は削除されました。 - CyAmze2yrコメント
First 2 sentences clash, mold them a bit more together and add a little bit of detail about the area he lives in. That would make it cool. Or even add that the leader was feared or something else about him.
この本は削除されました。 - CyAmze2yrコメント
Good strong yet basic start. Nice.
この本は削除されました。 - CyAmze3yrコメント
Great opening line.
Since ancient times, there were plenty of seniors who went to prison. However, it could be said with certainty that Xia Fei was the first to go to alien prison.