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davexlee

davexlee

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writing and reading

2020-12-24 入りましたGlobal
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8.3h

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42

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  • davexlee
    davexlee4 years ago
    発表

    first, I love the chapter naming. they are very refreshing and made me want to know more. the plot is enjoyable because it was well written. I was quite fond of the fighting scenes. MC has quite an insight too. overall it was a good story and very enjoyable. the fan of this genre will love it, as well as some new reader like me. keep up the good work, author nim.

  • davexlee
    davexlee4 years ago
    発表

    well written and very flowy from my point of view. I love the Mc, he has that frank yet childish kind of nature with a bit of mischief. the parent is no joke, I enjoy their interaction. it was very lively. my personal favorite chapter is chapter 6, the way you presented the information was well thought and easy to understand. all in, it was a good story and very enjoyable. I'm rooting for you, author.

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  • davexlee
    davexlee4 years ago
    コメント

    Welcome to the club, buddy

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  • davexlee
    davexlee4 years ago
    コメント

    I'm literally laughing out loud

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  • davexlee
    davexlee4 years ago
    発表

    I'm reviewing after the first update. The earlier chapter is for the character introduction, it's informative and precise. I like to know how the plot going from here. I have a suggestion, maybe the author shouldn't use the punctuation mark as the way to stress a word or sentence. In my personal view, this kind of use a little bit hindering the readers' rhythms of reading. But overall this is a promising start! I'm waiting for more updates, I'm cheering on you author nim.

  • davexlee
    davexlee4 years ago
    発表

    It's very informative, fast face slapping. Golden duo between the MC and fluffy haha. I can vividly imagine everything from your words. There were some errors punctuation mark but thankfully not disturbing the reading rhythm. Oh, that father and brother's of Yvonne? I hate them. Thank you. In a way a reader would hate 'villain' of course, not about how you write characters. Other than that I really enjoy your story. Can't wait to move to next chapters. I'm cheering on you, Author nim.

  • davexlee
    davexlee4 years ago
    コメント

    I do have a Lucas in mind😂

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  • davexlee
    davexlee4 years ago
    コメント

    Me! Me! Ask me!

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  • davexlee
    davexlee4 years ago
    コメント

    Me too, I've slapped hard.

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  • davexlee
    davexlee4 years ago
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    I'm in for the title. periodt.

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