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aha author could u please slow down with the over explanation, it feels like your characters talk a lot without saying anything meaningful. i couldn't read most of the stuff without skimming through it. good luck and i hope u improve!

didn't expect to find something like this in webnovel fanfic, truly great work. kudos, author.

hey man, your grammar needs serious work. you might want to check out one of those websites that correct spelling and grammar mistakes (like grammarlly or somthing) good luck

A story with a very good premise and character's, but there is no world building and character introduction. the world and it's characters are dumped at you from the start with no care for the pacing of the story, and the power imbalance is a major issue ##spoiler## The MC at rank 1 can sense when his father peek's at him when he's rank 8?? And MC getting immortal rank enemies when he's rank 1???### so it's a good story that's needs more fleshing out for the world and character's. good luck with your work author!!

it's a basic cliche story about going back in time for revenge, unfortunately the character don't have any defining features. they all act at the whim of the almighty author, people comment how the MC did "X" act or thought "y" thought and the author jumps to correct it in the latter chapters, this diminishes the origin of the characters and their motives especially for the MC. which drops the quality of the story. The story development also lacks because of this, there is no realistic way to make a story progresses without it feeling shallow with bad characters. good luck in your future endeavours author and I wish you the best of luck.

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