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Pratik_Guni1mthに返信 DraekaiI’m staying because of this
Hands? Check. Smooth, long legs? Check. Long white hair that reaches my lower back? Check. Vagina? Also check. Butt? Bubble. Boobs? Nice, firm F cups and very squeezable.- Pratik_Guni1mthコメントCh 223 Chapter 223: Pre-Halloween.
- Pratik_Guni2mthコメント
This is such bs bro. How did she see his potential? What did mc do to garner such interest in his potential ? This feels so forced
"Shadow Guard, watch that kid for me. He might have potential." Yafei said while storing the panties back in her storage ring. - Pratik_Guni2mthコメント
The problem with this story is that, The scene are really stretched like really stretched it's like you are trying to milk every single words you can to make the chapters longer For eg the conversation with miach, a lot of things were unnecessary like retelling every thing which we already know which makes the pace of the story sooo slow along with your release schedule it's hetic. For a story to be interesting there should not be any retelling of what has happened in the story which you have already told/took the time to tell it. It wastes the readers time and also occupies your book's portion which you could have used for other things I can see that you are using show not tell but you are using it too much there are times where you should slack and just tell not show which will improve the pacing problem There are times where you should just tell The story is good but I hope you will fix this problem which will make your book a lot better
Ch 19 The Day Is Almost Over, Hang In There - Pratik_Guni4mthに返信 Pratik_Guni
Retire*
Renji chimed in, "An ex-Shinigami who landed here once told us Fifth level lets you use intermediate-level Kido spells. In squads, you'd be ranked as Fifth or Sixth seat officers. Sixth level is like a Vice-Captain or Third Seat strength. I got to Fourth level with that Shinigami's help." - Pratik_Guni4mthコメント
Shinigami can’t reture,can they?
Renji chimed in, "An ex-Shinigami who landed here once told us Fifth level lets you use intermediate-level Kido spells. In squads, you'd be ranked as Fifth or Sixth seat officers. Sixth level is like a Vice-Captain or Third Seat strength. I got to Fourth level with that Shinigami's help." - Pratik_Guni4mthコメントCh 53 Chapter 49: He's Dead.
- Pratik_Guni6mthコメント
This smoking being cool is soo overrated, *look at me I’m 10-14 years old I’m soo cool* This is just a pathetic excuse for coolness
"I never thought I'd still be afraid of death," I mused self-deprecatingly, taking a deep drag of tobacco smoke that reached my lungs and then spiraled out in two plumes from my nostrils. - Pratik_Guni6mthコメントCh 16 Frost and Fury
- Pratik_Guni8mthに返信 RonaldMcDongald
I didn’t know it I thought it was barry
He turned out to be Flash? - Pratik_Guni8mthに返信 The_Puffer
What previous info?
He turned out to be Flash? - Pratik_Guni10mthコメント
How convenient....😏
"Huh?! It really... chose me!" - Pratik_Guni11mthコメント
Let's go!!!!😈
Goddess of Ice: Going for One Piece - Pratik_Guni1yrに返信 whitethief274
I can vouch it I have been binging the fic and i like it I dont think there is anything wrong
Hopefully, I'd get proper responses other than the fic is slow and the chat group took 11 chapters to be introduce, I am sure you understand that these alone aren't strong enough points to get a 1 star rating. - Pratik_Guni1yrコメント
Who knows?
Now forget all that and on a serious note let me ask you guys this --- " NOBODY " has ordered many new packs of cigarettes for himself before -- So the delivery dude is asking me for the address -- Where should I send them. - Pratik_Guni1yrコメント
A paper doesn't break
Everyone turned to face Alduin as the sound of shattering glass echoed throughout the room. It turned out to be a piece of paper that had broken, and its fragments lay scattered on the floor, which was already strange because the paper was supposed to be made of regular paper. - Pratik_Guni1yrコメントCh 133 Setting the Stage
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So... Both canon gets activated by same key Won't that mean magnolia will get destroyed no matter if alex takes the shot or not
"In the rare event something like this were to happen, I made some arrangements, creating a second Etherion cannon right under the Council's nose, linking the activation of both, under the very same key," Jellal replied, grinning as he did so. "One aimed at you, the other at a place you would die to protect, but can't right now." - Pratik_Guni1yrコメントCh 101 Chapter 98 - Cheap Tactics. Part 2
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Don’t force yourself Take care of your hea lth
A/N: Hello, since I literally have nothing to do and I'm the one in charge overnight watching my father's funeral, might as well write.