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PervySempai

PervySempai

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2020-10-11 入りましたGlobal
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  • PervySempai
    PervySempai6 months ago
    に返信 LittleRedsWolf

    it was stolen from another creator on ff. net the full story isn't finished and it goes by the title I still havent found what I'm looking for there's about 100k words after what they've posted here on there

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  • PervySempai
    PervySempai6 months ago
    に返信 LastGod

    it was stolen from another creator on ff.net no credit given plus they plugged a patreon the title of the original is I still havent found what I'm looking for

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  • PervySempai
    PervySempai6 months ago
    に返信 PervySempai

    the title of the orgininal on FF is I still havent found what I'm looking for

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  • PervySempai
    PervySempai6 months ago
    に返信 Blackday768

    it's stolen from another creator on Ff.net and it's not even finished

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  • PervySempai
    PervySempai6 months ago
    発表

    STOLEN NOVEL FROM FANFICTION IF zero stars were a thing you deserve them not only is this novel word for word copied, you couldn't even bother to find a complete one. THE ACTUAL TITLE OF THIS NOVEL IS I Still havent found what I'm looking for. AT FF.NET plus you plugged your patreon your scum of scum

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  • PervySempai
    PervySempai7 months ago
    に返信 Roaming_Enigma

    nah the Mariana trench has much more weight on it then most the ocean floor, like crush steel as easily as you crush paper heavy and that's only half way down

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  • PervySempai
    PervySempai7 months ago
    に返信 Reevoo

    realistically, if the senju integrated with civilians in mass, you have a lot stronger civilian ninjas, because the senju would have shared there knowledge with them the senju were a clan that rivaled the Uchiha in force and wealth, them integrating truly would have put every civilian student at the level of Sakura just with there good genes, I think they did integrate and then danzo stole the kids for his root and slowly killed off the older generations

  • PervySempai
    PervySempai8 months ago
    発表

    honestly? not a bad premis bad execution though. mc is super cringe but that's part of his character and it makes sense, you make a neet nearly god levels of power and he's gonna act cringe af. but what really kills this story for me it's the other characters tbh full of rehashed cleche plot points and out of character interactions with like every single character

  • PervySempai
    PervySempai9 months ago
    発表

    forced plot, no flow in the writing, words seem out of place In sentences, cleche self insert character into a fantasy environment, it's better then the original Chinese bullshit but not by much