The little sparrow, Flies with the wind. Follows adventures and treasures. So quick it is, in flight, in life. It misses the longing Of a Mighty bird, with a lovely voice, Bejewelled in gold
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Is this an original work or a fanfic? Just curious
Thank you so much love, it means a lot!!!! I'll work hard to keep the updates coming!!!
I am so sorry dear, it's because I'm rewriting a lot of the story! I messed up the plot and didn't add a good foundation for the story beats I had planned. AND I HATE THE MALE LEAD. Please hang in there!
I'm so sorry dear, it seems in my rush to build up the twists I didn't properly lay the foundation. Currently fixing it
I'm so sorry, i messed up the plot. There's so many plotholessss god help me. Currently I'm in the process of fixing it. Can I ask which part exactly you hate?
Hi, so sorry about the late review, something came up and I couldn't get access to the internet. Let me begin by saying that I read so many cultivation type novels that now when I see when and it doesn't seem particularly interesting I dip and run, but your concept is really intriguing. I love it! The idea of him having to complete this ridiculous list seriously is just hilarious. And his character is soooo great. I love the his inner monologues and how sarcastic he sounds and really the way he reacts to the modern world. Just gold. In terms of writing, it reads smoothly and easily and no glaring grammatical errors. However, there is a lot of information being told to you and not shown. This is more a personal opinion, because I find it hard to concentrate on the story when there's info dumping and a lot of the time I would end up skimming over to get to the good parts. Just wanted to point it out. I didn't want to give a run of the mill review and give false praise without any feedback, so sorry it took me so long to get back to you. Anyway good work, Fighting!
I love his inner thoughts!
Oh my god, I love the angle you're taking thissss. So funny
I really like this so far, it catches your curiosity from the beginning. Really well done. As feedback, I would say that some parts were a bit confusing and maybe the descriptions of the characters felt a little lacking, like for the main characters, not Raizel.
I think my hints were too subtle ahhh I'mmmm sorrryyy! Last chapter, basically the couple in the lobby are the female lead and Hyun. Honestly I messed up the descriptions bit too much.