Yeah nah zekram already seems like a great character

I'll go do that then I'll be out here cursing your good name if I'm disappointed however

realistically hisoka should lose id just like to point that out nate has the type advantage way more experience imo plus he actually completed a league circuit

haven't checked it out yet is cyberpunk any good though I've never actually watched it

were you entertained be honest

see nothing interesting the mc is dislikeable and he has the strength to one tap almost everything like it wouldn't be so bad if he got like a lucky item or shii that made him get so strong but sigh cant wait for it to end so nostalgia can finally stop forcing me to read this book I so clearly loathe

which is where the problem arises this isn't a conflict since it's so easily resolved like what's the point of this we all know he'll win and even if he dies he just gets a plus one which would be aiite but then he gets stronger

please don't make it a full chapter lewd I want content

sigh this is only getting worse ngl the fights aren't even interesting considering he can't die so everything is pretty much copy then paste atp

I can't really give constructive criticism atp since it's only the first chapter. I can however state my opinions and you take from it what you will so firstly I would've liked an introduction to the characters since it would get me more invested in them though given that you didn't do it here it would be weird to do it after unless you're going to do it by introducing a series of small flashbacks (this would help fix plotholes but would become irritating if this was used as a cure all ... im assuming you get what I mean) I liked how you built up the scene though there was a waste of ink because of the descriptions but I like it so far I'll try to do this every chapter and since I know that everyone thinks differently the scenes I won't agree with it would be nice hearing your reasoning behind them

imma go check it out should I give my opinion here or there

yeah the power dynamic is too frayed I'm actually surprised he hasn't started sleeping around or some shii yet . granted I'm biased by Greek mythology but a whole lotta demi daedras should be popping up soon

tiffania finally feels human I'm glad now I want to see how this will get mucked up now

i think you might be the person I can say I respect most on this platform imma go check what you wrote so far

Yeah no I took back what I said ages ago especially since the dumb thing was getting worse. I can just imagine some bs happening and he magically gets gils treasury or some similar shit

oh for the lovve of kami

*liked

I piled the chapter I'm glad you needed him tbh it's something I've always had an issue with while I like op characters they're only good when the power is earned And anyways please at least reduce the amount of genderswapped eeveelutions eevee has an 87.5% male ratio after all

I think I'm hating this mc even more and I'm still apalled that you chose tiffania like really she's so fricking plain

precisely