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Rating 3.2 for the following reasons: 1. Writing Quality (2 stars): It is a book written in English. Unfortunately, either the author doesn't have time to review his writing or perhaps its his 2nd or 3rd language. The writing quality is sub-par at best and while you can understand the story with little problems, you must constantly adjust the grammar in your head to make sense of certain sentences (about 4-5 per chapter of about 1000 words I believe the author mentionned.) 2. Updating Stability (4 stars): I cannot give more information since I have binged read this fanfic up to chapter 58 where I decided to make the review. From the stats I can see, the author releases 5 chapters per week of once again 1000 words. It is a nice stability but to be homest the chapters are a bit too small which causes the flow of the story to break inbetween every other chapters. 3. Story Development (3 stars): The story is pretty straight-forward and altough it lags in between chapters, it is a pretty nice novel. Unfortunately, the 3 stars is purely my personal opinion. Some decisions and story points seems questionable but I won't go into details since it would be a spoiler for anyone who reads this review. PS: Author please add the tag of RAPE or Sexual Assault in the synopsis which is a major downside/turnoff for many readers who would rather not read of such a subject. While it is very present in our society, as readers we hope to immerse ourselves in the story and this subject is unfortunately taboo for many readers. Adding the tag would only prevent many from wasting their time on an otherwise nice story or simply let them know that such a thing will happen in the story. 4. Character Design (4 stars): I love how you depict the 'new' Harry Potter. While not fully fleshed out yet nor having explained many of his current actions, I once again believe that perhaps a few additional hundred words in your chapter could allow you to rationalize the character's actions without having to leave your author notes at the bottom to allow us to understand the current scenario. Finally, when portraying McGonagall in your latest chapters, please remember that she is a professor and in the end, the safety and well-being of students is paramount no matter the political intrigues of adults. 5. World Background (3 stars): It is a basic Harry Potter world except for the obvious changes such as increasing their ages. For the moment, nothing as really been added to the world background except for the Potter's Estate which the author didn't go into great details in. To conclude, author, you have a really nice story lined up and with a few adjustments it could reach yet another height. I will give my recomendations below and feel free to ignore them if you feel that they are useless. After all, it is your fanfic and we are only readers! Recommendations: A. Grammar - Perhaps writing in google docs before copy pasting on Inkstone for Webnovel would allow you to spot errors more easily. Otherwise, once done with your text, simply copying it in google translate and having it read it to you would allow you to perfectly spot any lack or errors in your current text. B. Details - Simply adding 100-200 words in your chapter would allow you to flesh out your character and details of their surroundings more easily. Of course, it would take a bit more time. C. Story Development - Perhaps trying to focus a bit more on the magic of the Harry Potter world and less on the intrigues of Dumbledore and others would do well for your fanfic. After all, the main character regressed from hundreds of years to his 18's. He surely would have developed intriguing and useful magics or explored some rare secrets or locations. Adding perhaps new magical animals or rare plants or treasure location he knows of could be interesting. D. Tag - I say it again but adding the Rape or Sexual Assault tag would be quite useful for your fanfic as otherwise people will only curse at you once they reach that part and stop reading from there (which I will unfortunately due to personnal reasons.). Adding the tag will also allow your readers to know what they dive in. It would be the same for the Harem tag if you plan on making one as you mentionned not being certain about Ginny. E. Character Design - Now that is personnal preference but perhaps revising how you wrote professor McGonagall would be useful as she is decisively different and while not bad since it's your fanfic, it may stop many readers once more. Simply giving her more empathy would do great for her. F. World Background - Once again, exploring the secrets of Hogwarts (feel free to create them yourself) or simply the forbidden forest or shopping in Diagon Alley would give depth to your fanfic that it is currently lacking. With this, sorry for the long review, I now stand at almost 5000 character which is a lot more than I was planning om doing. However, I want to thank you for the great fanfic you brought to us and while I will unfortunately not be continuing along with you, I wish you all of the best!

See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

Nope not harem no worries while I like to put harem in my fanfics for my originals it’ll either be solo or one fl

No prob bro, btw I’ll make some promotion for myself. If you have some time I’d love your input on my book altough it ain’t pokemon nor a fanfic -> StarGate Only if you have time tho Thanks in advance if you do haha

I don’t remember exactly but it was in the 400’s

From the point I read it was solo, he had a couple of female friends but nothing more than that

Thanks man, I appreciste the support, especially since it’s been so long since I’ve published anything :)

Thanks for the info bro I had no idea!

Oh hey man, well I currently started an original novel but I did recently create a Fairy Tail fanfic plan. I’ll write it when I have the time, I’ve really gotten back into writing these days so yeah I do believe I’ll write another one ;) same for my other fanfic of danmachi I had plenty of ideas in mind for them both haha

Bro theres all of it on mtlnation already named: Pokemon: I started flashing with my handheld. There's 556 chapters ;)