AusyLust

If this is an original fanfic not a translation. Why doesn't the Mc tell them Uchiha and Senju are sister clans while Uzamaki and Hyuga are cousins, it'd make things way easier, bro could be like I think someone's manipulating them all to fight. It’d cut through a lot of the nonsense and if used right be a valid excuse for him to propose a marriage in the future.

Man, I swear… this would be one of the worst fanfics I’ve ever read if not for the formatting. But if that didn’t kill it? It’d be the complete lack of execution on what should’ve been a fire concept. Chapter 1 had me thinking, “Damn, this might be a hidden gem.” By Chapter 3-5? I understood why there were 80+ chapters with ZERO comments or reviews. That’s not a red flag, that’s a damn evacuation notice. The wish fulfillment? Trash. And look, I wouldn’t even be this harsh if the synopsis just told me upfront that’s what this was gonna be. But nah, it set itself up like it had depth, like it was gonna go somewhere, and instead, we ended up in generic isekai dumpster fire territory. This story is like ordering Wagyu steak and gettin’ served a microwaved hot dog. Disappointed ain’t even the word.

Bro wtf is this….why didn't u just make a fanfic as Deku….this was just handle in such a fan boy way its gross asf….

This author is dumb 😂😂😂😂😂

Wtf is this format it correctly at least…each chapter is like a paragraph long lol, idk if this was a joke but the concept is actually amazing, hopefully its rewritten id definitely read it

Why didn't bro choose omni-man?…avenger when your friends name is superman 💀

Oh god. You ever watch someone get this close to perfection, then completely fumble the bag so bad the whole project goes left? Like, so far left it’s unrecognizable? Yeah, that’s this story in all its essence. MC is set up to be strong from the start—not super OP, but powerful, right? Just needs to train a bit, right? But nah, bro’s first thought in a new world ain’t training, ain’t mastering his skills—it’s going on a damn adventure. Like, priorities, my guy. And let’s talk about this devouring power. Dude has the ability to consume and grow stronger, but he just… doesn’t use it? Low-key feels like the author forgot about it ‘cause we don’t even see it pop up until five chapters later. Like, why set up something that raw just to ignore it when it matters? Worst part? The plot situations. MC keeps gettin’ put in spots where he’s forced to be someone’s bitch or just randomly weak as hell. I see what the author’s tryna do—build a world that feels massive, make the MC’s journey feel earned, let him grow into his OP potential. But the execution? Painful. The pacing and decision-making got me side-eyein’ every chapter. Feels like this could’ve been fire if it just stuck to its strengths. But instead? It’s fightin’ itself every step of the way.

Haha it happens but keep it up man, just make sure to plot things out if you need too and figure out a sense of where you want character development to go.and then I feel like u Gucci, story got everything. Good luck

Yooo all I see is bro pulling out that fucken rod (pause) when devils pop up to his house swinging that bitch back away you demons, holy overkill 😂😭

Ou nah thats on me didnt realize he was as strong as Anos or well stronger than starting out (went back to chapter 1 and re-read it). But I was saying it didn't make sense cause I thought he was weaker, idk, if I know Imma end up battling other families, not gonna help them unless there was a deal like the families, could never go to war. Since he never did anything like that idk, kinda naive for someone the demon king powers no? But also makes sense him being over powered and shit seing them as competition. I was just curious about the reason why ya know.