Writing quality - 2/5, because of the foreshadowing the next chapter and dumb authors comments in each chapter. Do you have a bad self-image or something? Stop writing comments for approval. Updates - not bad 4/5 Story development - the story had a lot of improved changes by the translator, so 5/5 Character design - the way I see it the simulation made him a psychopath, I didn't have much of an opinion about mc originally, but with simulations I started hating his personality. I mean mc thinks he is good after meditation and self reflection and then does the opposite, weep like a weeb he is - 2/5 World background - everything is predictable 3/5

I don't know why you chose this song - it's not even good

I don't understand, what's the point of all this? Why does mc want to be a youtuber? For money? Just go to stark or something, why are you writing a f musical for views? Not only is that dumb, but now you should be a target with spy gadget videos and all. If this fic was about system that makes mc youtube videos, I'll understand and even read that, but without the system there's no incentive to do all of that.

Uhh, the infinite cycle this is. First we start with movies then anime, then manga/manhua, then webnovels/audiobooks... Then after the first cycle you watching movies again - and movies suck, they for some reason are full of flaws + you learn to predict what's going to happen aniway. With anime - most anime are either from manga or novels so it's very likely that you already read it. With manga - pages with no color start to annoy you so you switch to manhua pretty much very soon. With manhua - you read some good ones (who are never finished) and you are left with trash, after some time good ones become trash too, because artists are bad authors. So you are left with novels, some people use tts so they are listening to it like it's an audiobook. Audible audiobooks are also good. Our problem is that we are trying to find balance, but we can't maintain it. Or in other words - we want to stop wasting out time while also trying waste our time - it's not sustainable or even logical. The only way to quit is to quit.

Initially I liked the story, but then the translation got so bad, I had no choice but to give up. For example mc using "toilet water" to break from shisui genjutsu makes total sense... The water smelled so bad it woke him up, right? ... There are a lot similar mistranslated powers, items, names etc. The story gets worse too when mc finally defects from his village. Writing - if I could I would give a 0 Updates - 4 Story - 3 Character - nothing special 3 World background - at least background "exist", i didn't like it so 3.

Please fix this chapter, I had to reread it multiple times just to realize some content is missing due to copy paste. Some content is repeating too

I don't care how good is your grammar/updates/story/character/world. This is just a disgusting fanfic full of debauchery. Mc is a little spoiled boy who never grew out of her momma's tits. Having sex doesn't mean he is a badass - it means he is weak. Including brainwashing to the mix doesn't help mc situation whatsoever.

That was lame. Mc is a spoiled child who refused to grow up.

So akhishio and ariria are not part of the story, but characters in a distant future?

Well in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and everyone's opinion, I honestly believe that is a complete garbage written by the chat gpt.

Why is he making everyone weak.... I don't understand

Sounds not promising at all

Tbh I didn't enjoy this fanfic. Not that it's bad or anything, but nothing interested happened... No hook and no sinker you could say, who knows, it might improve, but the story was boring to me. The mysterious introduction to mc original body ruined the story to me. His system is not that impressive either - it's just there for some unknown reason. Mc is just a shitty version of Geralt of rivia - again with no reason whatsoever.

That's not how goblet of fire works...

So he knew that Dumbledore was manipulating him before even going to Hogwarts... Makes total sense...

Stop explaining yourself, nobody even reads that. Conflics creates more conflict, it's like you are asking for negative comments...

I will be honest, I didn't read what you wrote... You probaby were very emotional to write a long essay like this. You can't please everyone, if comments affect you so much I suggest to not read them, because that's the main reason why people start having a burnout and the way I see it - you are very close to it, on the edge even...

I read it, but I couldn't understand much at all