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LittolSol

LittolSol

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I am a writer of two years and this will be my official account. I specialize in Fantasy/Psychological Novels. Prepare for the upcoming Duchess.

2020-08-22 入りましたPhilippines
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ライティング

0.1h

読書の

6

本を読む

バッジ
3
瞬間
30
  • LittolSol
    LittolSol4 years ago
    発表

    Hi, author here. I'm shamelessly putting my novel five stars because I actually got aroused writing it lmao. This is a story about a woman who revealed herself to be a Goddess, chose the protagonist to be his king. Giving him the power of the thousands of souls that the Goddess collections. As new couples, they struggle the everyday life of what they should do as the girlfriend has the pride of a Goddess and the boyfriend has the massive wong and the microscopic talent

  • LittolSol
    LittolSol4 years ago
    に返信 CrimsonMoonLover

    Thaankyoouu soo muuuchh ^^!!

  • LittolSol
    LittolSol4 years ago
    に返信 CrimsonMoonLover

    Thanks for letting me know hahaha

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  • LittolSol
    LittolSol4 years ago
    に返信 Light_ray

    Thank you so much ^^ I'll keep working hard!!

  • LittolSol
    LittolSol4 years ago
    発表

    I could see the work you put into this novel ( he fact that you posted 4 chapters in one day) and I can also see that it also needs improvements. There are visible wrong grammar and punctuations and the character design is a tad bit confusing. Other than that, the story is good, the world and her origins is a mystery that it makes you want to know why she's there in the first place! Keep your stability of updates strong (I promise you, updating every day is really helpful), One last thing. You should fix your chapter titles, it looks really messy.

  • LittolSol
    LittolSol4 years ago
    コメント

    "I could feel my face turn pale and my eyes wide open" is the correct phrase for that.

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  • LittolSol
    LittolSol4 years ago
    コメント

    She sounds really shy and kind here but when she asked where and who the girl was, she sounded really mean. So it's really confusing.

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  • LittolSol
    LittolSol4 years ago
    コメント

    My head snapping is really scary, you should replace it with a "my head turned"

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  • LittolSol
    LittolSol4 years ago
    発表

    I just can't help but notice how great the characters and world development is. Although there were some grammar and punctuation, it can still be understood. Keep up the good work, it's a really promising work and I've added it to my bookmarks! 9.5/10!!!