Captain_Wonders
I'm a human I swear
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Captain_Wonders3yrに返信 LazyBumBumSame! I'm American so I have to change it all from my units to the ones most people use. 😃
When I thought about picking up my crossbow without my hands, it floated but once it moved more than 1/3rd of a meter away, it fell.- Captain_Wonders3yrに返信 Illegal_Alien_7762
This is a fair criticism, back at this point I was way less experienced as a writer and thought that I would make a 20 chapter novel. The novel is now 103 chapters long and far slower.
After being praised as a talent, Mother insisted I try to read. Mother would take me with her to the market where I would try to read signs and ask her what words mean. One day she decided to bring home a slate and taught me more conventionally. by age 3 I was literate. - Captain_Wonders3yrに返信 Illegal_Alien_7762
Do you really want to go through several chapters of the protag learning to walk?
After extensive practice, I was able to start walking on my own at around two months, and I even learned some new words. My mouth still wasn't strong enough to say anything until 6 months but by then I could understand most words. - Captain_Wonders3yrに返信 Illegal_Alien_7762
He is thinking, using 'these' denotes thinking, and using "these" denotes speaking.
'Why am I suddenly calm?' - Captain_Wonders3yrに返信 Illegal_Alien_7762
He assumes that it's his mom since she is one of two females he has ever seen and the other one is not present.
Mother drew a rune in the air to test my vision. - Captain_Wonders3yrに返信 Illegal_Alien_7762
Yes, but he is insanely smart because he has 40 years of experience as a human, albeit without all of the inconsequential memories like family or friends.
I started giggling and fumbling around like a madman. - Captain_Wonders3yrに返信 Illegal_Alien_7762
Nah, this isn't a nod to the title, awaken is just another word for wake up and Ingen was asleep for days.
*"Really? I haven't finished making the spell to awaken him."* father didn't wait for an answer as he rushed to the crib - Captain_Wonders3yrに返信 Illegal_Alien_7762
What about this is third person?
Two days later I woke up with people standing over me. - Captain_Wonders3yrに返信 Illegal_Alien_7762
The previous paragraph is dialogue, one does not speak in the past tense.
Suddenly a wave of lethargy enveloped me and I felt a presence against my mind, wiping away all my unnecessary memories. I forgot family, what I looked like, my crew, everything. Except for my studies and my mission. I fell asleep instantly. - Captain_Wonders3yrに返信 Illegal_Alien_7762
The prologue took place on a different planet, there are no characters to tell the story from other than Shen/Ingen. The third-person perspective was chosen for the prologue so the reader could see the thoughts of everyone they needed to, the rest of the story does not need this.
(AN: From here on the novel will be in first person) - Captain_Wonders3yrに返信 DiperZCh 87 Progress at a Snail's Pace
- Captain_Wonders3yrに返信 loskro
:)
"Yes, it goes well in sausage and makes good pudding." She cut jugular and blood flowed into the bucket. - Captain_Wonders3yrに返信 loskro
Nah, Ingen knows how to skin and gut a deer, not how to pudding deer blood.
"Now that the deer has no blood, it is ok to be stewed." I slow-cooked part of the deer with the remains of the milfoil I found in my icebox, gave Orin the parts that I couldn't eat along with some more bits, and hung the rest of it high in a tree. - Captain_Wonders3yrに返信 Ankit_GoDelockCh 1 Prologue
- Captain_Wonders3yrに返信 Clarence_Ng
She was with the Constables from the beginning. Originally she planned to make an 'accident' out of Ingen, which is where you see the aggression in the beginning. Then, out of the blue, the king changed her orders and she had to make nice with Ingen so she could steal his ideas. Then her orders changed again once the king decided that he had enough of Ingen's inventions and was going to assassinate him.
Ch 76 A Small Record-Breaking Achievement (Part 3) - Captain_Wonders3yrに返信 SireZippy
If it seems non-sensical, that's because it is. Ingen is going through the motions right now with no idea what's going on. Also, if you notice, I made Laura too attached to Ingen (even when he ignores her completely she still pretends to see him favorably) to foreshadow her trying to steal Ingen's work, and the "rebellion" (which will be named later in the story), is going to hold a role in the future.
Ch 69 Grim - Captain_Wonders3yrに返信 Tekbox
Fair, I still wanted to point it out though
"First thing, do not fight them unless you are cornered. Those monsters are incredibly fast and strong, even the Mage Knight spell Full Guard barely allows a veteran to fight them on equal footing. You are no veterans, just kids. - Captain_Wonders3yrに返信 ZalfeonCh 17 Second Stage
- Captain_Wonders3yrに返信 Ethan132Ch 16 Tenacity
- Captain_Wonders3yrコメント
DEATH FLAG!
"Sure, okay. I like that furball and teaching one or two of them makes no difference." Lith was glad to accept her deal. He couldn't even imagine a fake mage defeating an Awakened one as strong as Kalla. There was little he wouldn't do for power and knowledge, helping the young Byk was nothing to him.