XavierE

funny how some people say this is a cliche or this never happens when reality proves them wrong. its just people who are bullied feel ashamed to speak up. if anyone reading this is getting bullied, dont be afraid to speak up. idk how it may be for where you live, but i was bullied first week in highschool(for me i was around 13 years old) i told everyone. teachers, deans, principal, vice principal, guards. and they did nothing. but the next time i was about to be bullied i fought back...unfairly. we used a iron ruler in school, and its ends were pointy and sharp. and i just started flailing it. when teachers came and saw what happened, because i made complaints before and to my parents and even my relatives (they did try to help but couldnt due to lack of action by the school) nothing happened to me. i wasnt suspended, put in detention nothing. my situation and your situation may be different but as with anything, when in distress make noise.

Pretty darn decent. 8/10 --mini review--no spoilers-- Grammar is good - very minor mistakes Story is unique enough - the mc didnt start of as the pope as i thought initially for which i am glad. the progression can be on the faster side but for this story it is understandable. if i had to give a suggestion it would be to slow down the pace a bit and develop your characters a bit more @authorsan characters can be worked on - they aren't bland, but nor are they unique enough to differentiate themselves. even if they are to die sometime in the future, a bit more focus on their story would be great. world building is good - a bit confusing if you arent paying attention, but its logical enough and thought out enough for where the story is at as of now.

See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule

Author here, I will try to keep the updates consistent, around 2 chapters a week. it's my original work and it's also my first real serious novel. I am doing this as a hobby so I apologise if my upload schedule does become a mess remember it's just me editing and writing the story, so if you have noticed any errors please let me know.

A novel with a system with all the worst elements , which makes this story a chore to read .the first few chapters supposed to captivate the reader or at least make the reader wish to carry on .this story failed at that .the system was cliche and the mc's personality is masochistic .the overall premise of the story ,is pretty good but how it was told was a failure