Blanaba
ライティング
読書の
412
本を読む
Uh... Starrk was a natural arrancar before Aizen met him. So is Starrk lying, or is this a mistake?
Jeez, my bad. Even with the question mark, in the context of commenting on a paragraph I read into your statement as a dig at the textual and editing quality nested with a question to appear less mean (a shitty thing that happens all the fucking time on the internet), which would be a shortsighted thing to do and, considering we are on webnovel, the chances it was that were higher than normal and I made a bad assumption because of that. That's on me. Sorry about that, man.
It's first-person narration, and it's completely in character. It's genuinely not a mistake. I don't know why you imply that it is. Not that I'm invested in defending this story, I just started reading it, but a criticism like this needs to be fair to be valuable. Just as important to structural critique is not just an evaluation of its correctness, but it's success at achieving a specific effect. This line seeks to characterize the narrator as he acts diagetically and actually works well to that end, I think.
Ngl, I think you did a fantastic job with this chapter with how the push and pull of the fight descended into cerebral, philosophical musings on the nature of deception to emulate Harribel falling deeper into Itachi's illusions. It was really interesting and well written.
Well... he does have Mythic Beast Amber, but it isn't that useful cause... you know, you die when you use it.
Ah... he can't quite make reflexive use of infinity without the six eyes, can he? And this girl's technique, it's Charles Bernard's future sight, just not held back by his shitty "drawing the next manga panel" interpretation. Nice, I love it.
Come on, even if you don't intend to the potential, for it creates tension. Don't spoil your own damn story, man.
Literally "black steel?" I guess it works, but it feels kinda shallow as names go. I hope it doesn't remain that way, though.
I wouldn't say out of character, just a little shallow for what it's trying to demonstrate: that Netero deliberately constructs an outwardly childish persona.