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Zeim_Zeio

Zeim_Zeio

Lv10
2020-03-22 入りましたGlobal
71.7h

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  • Zeim_Zeio
    Zeim_Zeio4 years ago
    発表

    I'd give 5 for the story, I mean it's pretty enjoyable for a fun and chill read. The author said that he would make longer chapters which is a good thing since the chapters right now are very short. I just want one thing that is for Li Sheng to **** that bitch who keeps on framing him and make her a slave who has no rights at all.

  • Zeim_Zeio
    Zeim_Zeio4 years ago
    に返信 Error_4

    Man, I’m reading the novel. It seems that there Is no harem here, I’m on 140. Mind spoiling me a bit about the harem? I mean, I would want for her aunt to be a part of his harem, the elder sister of Liulu.

  • Zeim_Zeio
    Zeim_Zeio4 years ago
    に返信 Zeim_Zeio

    Oh, I see. i liked your idea of the story though, but the way you wrote the first three chapters is pretty bland honestly. I remember you sayIng all the currency and then having the equivalent eXchange for them for hundreD billion or ten billions on which you could very well make scales for it or just use some hyperbole or metaphors to describe Its worth. I’d continue reading it. ThAnk you.

  • Zeim_Zeio
    Zeim_Zeio4 years ago
    発表

    I’ve been reading this novel for 48 chapters and I just noticed that the author make several plotholes or Informations that don’t connect at all. The interaction between Esmi and Ryder is alSo non-sense. There was this chapter when Esmi said that she had not even dated a man before but then she’s been having *** with Ryder like all. She even said that it’S finally a long tiMe aFter she liked someone. Lel. juSt particually noticed it since the author needs to pay more heed to info dump and Make tHe chAracters more reAlistic not like robots.

  • Zeim_Zeio
    Zeim_Zeio4 years ago
    コメント

    Wtf, what happened to the real world? Dang, the author forgot the real world. Lels.

  • Zeim_Zeio
    Zeim_Zeio4 years ago
    発表

    This feels more lIke an essay more than a story lol. The explanations are too long which is not yet needed. All the cultivation level is introduced at the start leaving no excitement for the readers to explore and continue reading on the systems. The author could have tried to introduced the cultivation leVels and the world in a mystifying way when the readers will all be piqued. I must say that the author has good ideas but how he expose the story and narrates It does not give any thrill to the readers or make the readers hooked on the story.

  • Zeim_Zeio
    Zeim_Zeio4 years ago
    に返信 Scripture02

    How big is harem?

  • Zeim_Zeio
    Zeim_Zeio4 years ago
    に返信 Zeim_Zeio

    The theme of friendship is also quite debugging since it seems like Mike and the MC is gay with each other. What ****.