Blue_J_Writes

I know I keep yapping on these chapters with my comments. But you're doing a good job. I'll try to turn down my yapping lol.

Oof lol

Maybe instead of having this here show us this later on or something. Just a thought.

Ah I see. Kinda would’ve liked to see a moment where the personality change happened. But that might affect pacing negatively, so I don’t really know.

Do we find out how so? Like we get a glimpse at the level of close they used to be. But how did they grow apart?

Good details here.

Redded eyes? Like on the verge of crying?

I’ve seen some comments on pacing for the first chapter. I can see what they’re saying but it’s not much of an issue to it. As long as you stay consistent to it and it has something in chapter two to kick things up a gear (I’ll read chapter 2 soon).

I mean I’ve only seen this type of dialogue turn into something sus. But I’m trusting the process.

Heads up you called both beast types here special grades.