Would've rather seen some new more personal transformations, maybe with new powers included, then just the same straight color changer multipliers

It's a cliche, sure. But some novels at least try to explain it. So why? Does the MC have more energy despite being in a lower realm? Is his body somehow improving despite your 55 balls being described as purely spiritual? Is there a psychic, spiritual strength he is refining?

Struck by heavenly lightning? Found and ate the Red Pine Fruit? Plead the 5th? All much easier than this unprovoked web of lies

The presence of a sword indicates the imminence of war. Why gain power if not to use it?

Can't use a word counter on my side of the fence, they certainly feel short as hell. I almost bought your Pat r eon until I realized it would be 10 dollars for like 15 minutes of reading.

Everything Sir Squirrel said was perfectly accurate, the decisions made seem flippant at best and the development of his power manages to seem both unearned and lackluster simultaneously. The problem begins at the very beginning. We are given the illusion that his system-like Sacred Gear offers the choice between certain class sets. This is a mistake because any choice the MC could've made would be met with skepticism from people who wanted something different. But the author made the MC choose the worst possible class, a production class that would put him at the mercy of whoever decides to fund his operation and give him little combat potential returns compared to other ones hypothetically. Now, this could be a moot point for a couple reasons. The author plans on giving the Boosted Gear to the MC. That would eliminate the need for combat potential from a different class. There are also 'permanent boost elixirs' he has already introduced. A roundabout way but still a solid one. But there are other methods to have done this without the disappointing illusion of choice and the odd, undeserved shoehorning of the FMA style alchemy powers. Exhibit A: A Sacred Gear that simply gives him the powers of the world of FMA. The MC would be forced to learn and explore the world he was dropped into from a magi-scientific standpoint in order to shape it accurately, which would be interesting in itself. Being an amped FMA alchemist would allow limitless avenues to transmute himself, increase his combat potential and "spell" arsenal, and create alchemical enhancers, especially the Philosopher's Stone. Exhibit B: Reincarnate a character from FMA:B instead of a random teen. Exhibit C: Make him choose Mage instead and put enchanting and potion brewing as part of that system. Now, I could've handled all the fumbling so far as long as the story is entertaining and the MC rises to the occasion consistently despite this. But the worst part of this story for me is: Slow updates, and SHORT, SHORT chapters. I'm talking barely over a thousand words. Now this is a new story, so there are only 16 chapters to work with right now. But by God, I'm predicting right now that he won't wrap up with Riser's arc until between chapter 30 or 40, and based on that, I'm not sure if I want to stick around for that kind of chapter length.

Representing passion or selfishness vs. fate or karmic ties

A fantastic story from a fantastic writer. Heartwarming exploration of a new family dynamic, careful exploration of all characters involved, exquisite pacing (despite impatient and tasteless people saying otherwise), and more promise of a fulfilling and powerful story than an overwhelming majority of fics this site offers. I am not even halfway through and I'm deeply satisfied, wish the author all the best and to not let the usual stupid crowd on this hellsite get to them

Careful, he might wander into another universe again

Rookie numbers

Haha, RussianBadger reference

Abridged reference

Slow? You have to wait for Z to happen for a real challenge now. Of course it is good to be prepared but...

And if there is a moat around it, and it's dragonstone? Entry level=impossible.

Asking Robb Stark to promise peace between them when Raenon joins the war in exchange for destroying his current threats would've been a great deal and a good first step to mending the bonds between the houses.

But Bruce Wayne might.

I think Batman only kept to that philosophy for himself, he didn't particularly care if other people killed bad guys in some comics.