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I love cyberpunk stories but I couldnt get past the first few chapters. Firstly theres no quotation marks and its just - What was that? Secondly its very much inspired by Cyberpunk2077 which is usually a good thing except a random guy got put into David's body and automatically acts and is trained like V, which shouldnt be possible at all. Plus the dialogue for the scavs is terrible, like voicelines in the game responding to noices.

It's alright, it's very much an A to B plot. Theres not much character or world building. My main issue with it is that the MC is getting so strong so quickly without reason. There's like 3 or 4 powers he's gotten that wasn't even introduced into the story, like he just randomly bought it from the store one day or something. He got the power of wind from the statue and rarely used it because he somehow got the power of a true dragon and folded Dvalin. He also told everyone about the chat group and I can understand that since they are known as a traveller from another world but the other chat members that are in normal worlds or konosuba just accept it as a fact. The pacing is just really really bad.

Most of the things Danzo does are off screen, he'd never do it himself. Even we don't know everything he's done due this. Whether its Yahiko, White fang, Rumors in Konoha, the desecration of the Uchiha, Root he's done too much.

Its a good story. It doesn't really focus on SAO as much as it does the concept of it. It's mostly world building at the moment, with very few interactions with the main characters. The reason I find this book troubling is because of how complicated it is. The breaks are quite long so when I returned to read it, I had no clue what was going on, so unless I reread everything I'm screwed.

could have been on purpose as a sign of disrespect

Why tf isnt this a lower rating. The story has no plot or substance other than manipulate anime girls into "Body Usage." Like really? The guys so insecure he lets other men die so that his girls remain pure. And to protect the girls he suddenly says they have nothing left to offer him to protect them so they need to use their bodies, thats some sick shit and I'm suprised people are actually entertaining this when the writing is awful, theres no plot, the mc is super unlikable and theres no story or world development. This is the worst thing I've read in a long while.

Never bet on Hakari

"" Is what most books and professional writing styles use. Its alot more expressive and familiar and someone whos used to reading standard dialogue won't enjoy -- at all.

It's fine I guess. It's not great but it was alright until the Author changed the dialogue from "Hello" to -- Hello -- At that point just put it on wattpad.

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