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Muy buen fanfic la verdad, pero esperes que dejes ese capítulo R18 para los pobres que no lo pueden pagar🤣

Espero no le des poderes para alterar la realidad ni nada parecido, gracias por el capitulo.

La madre está en el harem?

Eso de dar habilidades a otros me parece de lo peor, de por sí lo del sistema es fanteseoso pero dar habilidades a otras personas 🤮

Fuck, prefiero mil veces a Tara que a la novia del MC

Me encanta el romance pero acá no, no me gusta la pareja del MC, y encima las parejas de sus amigos o las chicas que hay alrededor del MC son mejores, varias veces casi deje de leer por el romance. Por lo demás es una excelente novela.

It's getting a little difficult for me to read because you write a lot of "who" 39 times it was repeated, it would be better if you looked for a synonym or rephrased the phrase, because it is not good for a word to be repeated so much in that way. You do it very well.

I'm not talking about people's reactions, I understand it, what I'm talking about is that when, for example, you wrote “I grab her with her black hands” or something like that, it became weird, it would have been just as weird with “I grab her with her white hands” just “I grab her with her hands”, now that I've reached chapter 57 and it doesn't happen so much anymore. Also good fanfic, it's a shame that just when the zombie apocalypse begins I caught up. Oh and a question, will there be R18?

Is it necessary to mention so much that he is black?🤣, it was already understood in the first chapters that he is black.