An Otaku
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pick a gd name, noob Cai ji rookie, coward pr something ffs
edit, waste of a chapter
wasteful, useless info that's not needed and taking up your word spaces for more actual content towards the main story. nobody cares about a useless non party members back history and job info.
why is fang Hao so distrustful, I hate he's making people sign slave contracts just bc he's a paranoid lil turd. like dude you have one completely loyal faithful undead hero man tf up
no, it's not 🤣 stop being lazy, unless you're dyslexic or have other illiterate problems then maybe.
Female leads are meh, Darlene's transcendence is taking way to long for a useless wife that no one cares about. lina and aria should be the focus of his women. They have better personalities and are written out better than a sniffling low esteem maid and stupid Lynn whose been gone for over a hundred chapters now with hardly any info on wtf is going on. do better with the females bro, get some help from women on how to flesh them out better
ew absolutely not pls
bogging not begging
in future add less details. you're begging chapters with details about classes and dpint calculated math on theoretical damage which has no place in stories. it's fine to expand a little bit but don't waste an entire chapter on it. I'm literally skipping whole chapters at this point bc it's useless info toward the overall story. background, bad ass fight scenes, funny, sad happy, depressing, personal moments to make it feel real. these are what's needed. if you can't supply enough don't write. adding word fillers is poor authorism
I'm only reading this book mainly bc Ren is kinda cool as an anti mc and is a cold hearted ruthless bastard