Doverow
Just an average reader with extreme lows and highs of reading. Love myself a good kingdom builder sadly their quite rare and mostly get boring unless your the author of Tyranny of Steel. 10/10.
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Doverow7dコメントactor in real life too
" No, no it's not what you think! It's just embarrassing because I was issued a quest that led me to kissing a grandma. That's how I got these points" Leo said as he lied through his teeth.- Doverow7dコメント
Now time to swindle some players to do his bidding
Only after he found out this detail, did Leo wish to engage in a difficult mission such as the wolf extermination as if death was something severe and painful, then Leo did not wish to risk completing the mission and felt like it was better decision to take his chances somewhere else and escape Silverpine Village all together. - Doverow8dコメント
Aliens
"You must have felt it too. Those things in the sky will soon fall. From my observations, they may be circling the earth to distribute their forces. But it won't be long before they descend." - Doverow8dコメント
Now will he do the same?
Jun Wu Xiao smiled contentedly as if he had achieved what he intended. - Doverow8dコメント
has be curious for when mc is going to spread cultivation
Humans might be selfish in their own way, but is it really selfishness? After decades or a century, humans will die, and their efforts and achievements will not be for their own use but will be passed on to future generations. - Doverow8dコメント
was this meant to say 18 hours?
"After I broke through to a new realm, I made another breakthrough. This breakthrough was similar to the minor realm breakthroughs in the body refinement realm. My overall strength increased by a third, and my bones were further strengthened. Indeed, the cultivation time has become longer than before. It took me about eighteen years and nine months to break through, and I used to cultivate sixteen hours a day in the body refinement realm. After this breakthrough, I began cultivating sixteen hours a day." - Doverow10dに返信 DaoistKqNIvV
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"I want to open my own bakery," Edward says and he did like cooking since he always offered to cook the food we 'liberated' from the German supplies. - Doverow12dコメント
shouldn't the human be faster since, the cultivation change hasn't happened outside yet
Both were at the first level of the nascent soul realm. They had been at the first level for 1 and a quarter years. - Doverow13dコメント
He's still alive? remind how long its been? and how long his realm lived?
In an ocean world, a merman named Jack was one of the few experiencing the benefits of cosmic dao comprehension. - Doverow14dコメント
I see where this is going now
"You can contribute by either writing books or outstanding performance." - Doverow15dコメント
Nice detail
Indeed, he now took a bit more care of his appearance. Although not excessively, he could pass for an ordinary person. Though his face still looked quite youthful, his hair had turned silver-white. - Doverow16dに返信 Doverow
Ahh forgot all of what you said while writing that, but a way to break down how to write more descriptive is to think about the location, its details, its name, its history that you make for it, and so on. So if you were to write about the mc making a sect and then 200 years later there’s disciples you might describe the history of how it came to be, for the readers purpose not the disciples getting a intro. Because they most likely would already know one of the first cultivators from history.
- Doverow16dに返信 TheCharacter
Yeah that’s what I thought, I guess what trying to say is that the world it’s self lacks its own lore. A way to build onto would be describing details about the political make up. Like details on kingdoms and names? Tell me if im wrong but i dont think a kingdom name was said once in the novel. Though i will say you did do well during the mountain kingdom negotiations, because you told details about the kingdom. I’m guessing this is alternate history, just based on my knowledge of real world history. Overall I gave a 4 star on world background because right now in the story it doesn’t really matter, and the character isn’t really focused on details much. So if he matures more maybe he will focus on those details more. That gives you the opportunity to learn more about descriptive writing. Anyway I like the novel and hope it’s a good learning experience for you.
- Doverow28dコメント
Couldn’t they have taken a ship here??
"Wow…" Only one word escaped Adam's lips. This was the first time he had seen the ocean. He couldn't help but be moved by the scenery. - Doverow29d発表
It's a well written piece, and the world background and concept as a whole is pretty cool. some things could've been done better but overall story is good. but the mc is completely retarded, which is a complete turn off, I tried to read more than just the free chapters, and all I can say it doesn't get better.
- Doverow29dコメント
Hmm this novel concept is even more intriguing. Good work author.
"You won't awaken any natural affinities until you've become a Cultivator unless you're a Manamatus, so it'll be hard to tell what suits you. I recommend finding a Technique that suits all Elements or has special effects to give you an edge in battle." - Doverow1mthコメント
The demon is already getting to him
"I can't cry over spilled milk now... What's done is done."