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I write this novel just to see if maybe I can make writting a side job and still enjoy what I do.
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fegzzxc1mthコメントwhose speeking right now?, it's so confusing !!!
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i was unable to understand anything from the conversation it doesn't mâles any sense , sometime we know whose speeking sometime we don't you use coma AT thé start of a conversation but forget to use another one once the caractère finish talking. And i can't make sensé or what th MC is talking about when he's thinking or talking since you use or not coma " " , depending on hiw you feel and it makes it impossible to want to read even if it looks interresting. I skipped most or the whole chapter since it was so much of a headache to understand what was happening, with Time laps and all that
Ch 1 beginning of new era - fegzzxc4mthコメント
ahahaha, thats's some simple minded people its's refreshing Reading those type lf character, Hope she get Time to develop her character
If before when she saw the man she just liked him, but now she fell in love. At the thought of love at first sight she cried harder, not out of sadness but happiness. - fegzzxc4mthコメント
**she /her
Probably because he was annoyed because his hand was bitten, the person slapped him hard. - fegzzxc4mthコメントCh 6 Lily Demeter
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he**
After walking for a few minutes she finally arrived near the road, many cars were passing by, kayle tried to find a taxi passing by. - fegzzxc4mthコメント
her** body
Seeing how the girl was looking at him, Kyle didn't care and slowly took off the bear fur coat he was wearing, and put it on to cover his body. - fegzzxc4mthコメント
how Can he be Homeless if he has the house of his parent?, doesn't make sense
Even though he got the protection money, the money was only enough for food so for a bed, he sometimes slept in a bar or on a park bench. He became homeless. - fegzzxc4mthコメントCh 2 Chapter 2
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- fegzzxc6mthに返信 IPI
seriously do you hear even what you're saying yourself sigh
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its'sa chinese nouvel of course there isn't Logic
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here WE go boys, that's it finally something that looks Real, when you push too much timide people there réalisations IS wonderful and crazy
It was....almost exhilarating! - fegzzxc1yrに返信 Yuri_is_Ntr
yeah for sûre you proof how much you can't make an argument without insulting people
"As weak as I am now, knowledge is power. That would also attract too much attention and the royal family would probably pressure me in handing in all that knowledge to increase the military strength of the kingdom. I need to slowly create a reputation while gaining the trust of the major powers inside the city. Since I'm planning on creating a harem, as might as well start where the best flowers in the kingdom are gathered." - fegzzxc1yrに返信 Yuri_is_Ntr
Lol, here i was trying to have a discussion and all you find to have a débuté is carlingue other dumb sigh, then start talking then
"As weak as I am now, knowledge is power. That would also attract too much attention and the royal family would probably pressure me in handing in all that knowledge to increase the military strength of the kingdom. I need to slowly create a reputation while gaining the trust of the major powers inside the city. Since I'm planning on creating a harem, as might as well start where the best flowers in the kingdom are gathered." - fegzzxc1yrに返信 Yuri_is_Ntr
yeah but then tell me do you think rich people when they use a lot of money for trivial thingd do they think it's a lot for them, or it's the poor thinking that
"As weak as I am now, knowledge is power. That would also attract too much attention and the royal family would probably pressure me in handing in all that knowledge to increase the military strength of the kingdom. I need to slowly create a reputation while gaining the trust of the major powers inside the city. Since I'm planning on creating a harem, as might as well start where the best flowers in the kingdom are gathered." - fegzzxc1yrコメント
i'm disappointed in you Author, to think that this type of skill would pop out twice prove you don't even try to innovate and your plot focus is just wishfulfillment
- Level 3 Passive Skill scroll: 'Self Contraception.' - fegzzxc1yrに返信 Duke_Asmodeus
the character building is so shallow, that it doesn't explain why it's excalate so fast, and why she would accept so easily not even trying to stop him and just accepting it
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