RestingTree
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You should really look into how americas debt works
I don’t know if the author deletes bad reviews or if the readers of Webnovel are actually just that brain dead. The story is a enjoyable little read that shouldn’t take more than 1-2 hours to finish up to the paid chapters. Power scaling in this universe sucks, he tried to make item rarity be a notable factor, but when all the issues are solved with green items and blues are game changing, you’ve gone a little to far. Also the MC switches from lonely orphan who due to circumstance is an attention seeker and therefore became the best gamer as it gave him the most attention. To this mysterious guy who lacks all emotion, he stares people down with soulless eyes trying to understand the foreign concept. Then he’s back to the grinning goofball who does wacky outrageous solo plays and OMG he’s cool, he’s nonchalant and really good without being humble ?!?! Woah he must be like the coolest mc ever, as a 14 year old I to am as cool as him and do not care what others think. Also atleast the first few paid chapters (I didn’t go farther). You can unironically in one scroll, like from thumb bottom of screen to top, finish the whole chapter. The fact anyone thinks a pay per chapter model even makes sense is delirious, especially in a case this outrageous.
Otherwise they wouldn’t be an adult? Do you think you die at 18 if you haven committed something wrong? That god personally checks in on you?
Lol
I love all rounders, Can’t wait for this to be an ez plot device so he has a lot of mana for his sword skills and uses his magic as a trump card because it’s to difficult to write compelling magic combat and it’ reduced to his way of dealing with swarms, low level antagonist just there to show how strong he’s gotten and how he can 1 shot them, and a dues-ex-machina
Idk, I think there might be a foreign object on his left chest.
if anything like a comet we're to be on a guarantees trajectory for earth, unless it was the size of the moon we could pretty reliably do something. things of that mass or little mass are not going to be attracted to earth when the sun and other planets are around us. most comets or meteors that hit earth are accidental and just happened to pass by on its way to a bigger mass, but we were close enough to pull it in, or it's trajectory just intertwined perfectly.
Its good if you like it off the first like 10 chapters, but personally, not for me. The parallel-worlds early-guide character litterally tells him "The other leo was a calm and composed person known for having a cool-head", and he says "I do aswell just not around you", bro litterally has never had a cool-head or thought about any parts of his situation in detail at all. The writings good but the moods casual on the border of comedic, but it fails to be comedic and just ends up reading like someone else telling a story while focusing on something else like, "Yeah and there was this one guy who asked me to fight him and I didnt really feel like it but hey it was a then and there thing".
I mean, its THE weapon for personal use, maybe a band of soldiers or an army would prefer spears and shields, or a hunter would prefer a bow and dagger. But even soldiers and hunters were known to carry short-swords with them as a back-up. Plus with the cultural aspect, most societies have famous legends about swords in them or famous generals who kept swords as heirlooms. Just a lot of Sword-culture throughout history, throughout modern novels, throughout everything.
So few stories do magic well, and its always side characters whose development in magic doesnt actually have to be delved into or thought out to much that end up being the magic-casters. Even though I always know it wont be, I still always hope the main character can/will use magic proactively.
last 40 years.
Good Story, a semi-cliché idea but still a very interesting one. The writing is good but the phrasing and how articulate the author can be is on the lower side, it fluctuates from being to casual to to formal, never really finding that sweet spot and never seeming quite right. Up to the max FREE chapters, its a nice casual read, but sadly, I personally wont be paying to read any further in. The story isn't very grabbing and the authors tendency (or maybe preference) to write a twist happening, and then an explanation story after, in a flash-back like way, simply doesn't work. Prime Example: He calls out a maid for being an assassin, and he talks about how he suspected her for a while now. You as the reader go; "WTF? This was literally never mentioned and he has never been shown to suspect anyone of literally any thing. " Then the next chapter is a head-ache inducing info-dump on how he suspected 3 people, and why, and how he confirmed it was her. This style of writing works well in full-length books, not chapter based novels where people need that information before the twist, or they wont know what's happening. And its especially jarring with the English-level often displayed. If the author reads this tl:dr; You have a good story, you have a good idea, your not bad at writing, but your English or the way you at least write it, is uncomfortable to read, your stories a bit to fast paced to ever actually care about any of the events, and it makes long events that you the author clearly cared about, such as the maid spy scene, seem way to long, as all your readers are people who liked your fast-paced back to back action. If you can, Id suggest getting an editor, and if you cant, possibly re-read the chapter before you upload it, and think "Does this sentence sound akward? " or " Does this flow well? ".
bro wtf are you talking about, litteraly every state in America has internet.