AndromedaAirlines

Weak writing, poor in-world logic, fairly broken English and an extremely boring, shallow and unlikable main character. Somehow feels more tiring to read than actual machine translations from similar types of stories.

One of the dumbest chapters in fiction I've ever read.

Yeah, this is of course based on the first two chapters, but in my experience the start is generally a very good indicator of the rest of the story, as it should be. If these kind of characters are what you actually aimed for, then some of it is just a case of differing tastes, I suppose, though I don't feel like that's entirely accurate.

It's a cringy mess with completely over-the-top and childish character behavior that constantly break any sort of immersion. No character in the story has even come close to actual human behavior so far, and that never bodes well for a story. Narration and descriptions are weak, but not as bad as the characters, and the plot seems to steer heavily into over-the-top unfunny comedy and coincidences. It's just not good. I don't know if you've improved since you started writing this story, but if you take a look at these chapters now, can you really, honestly say that you think this is worth reading? I'm not surprised it has a bunch of views in a place like webnovel though, but that does not indicate any sort of quality. I apologize if this comes as a surprise, though I'm guessing you'll dismiss it as 'trolling' or whatever, as is often the case. Either way, it doesn't seem like it'll be worth reading any further, so good luck with your writing.

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Yeah.. 3/10 writing quality seems to be the case for this story.

Looks like this is going to be a solid 3/10 story, based on this chapter.

What a generic, uninteresting Mirko you've put together here.

So much asspulling to stick close to canon.

So.. first fight Mirko takes after meeting the MC, she has to get saved or die.. Seriously? So much bad writing.