TheRougeBanker
A rookie writer who needs to get some practice in.
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oh no, I became what I wanted to destroy
The thing he used once and didn't know how to replicate, he magically applied the same skill to his daggers?
Suddenly he has combat instincts, an amazing ability to calculate and the ability to fly on wind?
Suddenly went from the MC apparently knowing how to put on the gear in seconds after never having fought in his life, until the fight with the prodigy, to suddenly the sage being there? No struggles putting on the gear or mention of sage suddenly appearing.
What happened to his ribs what hurt whenever he moved?
We get mention of a room, statues and a door but no mention of materials, back to the thing about descriptions not having much detail.
So just the wind from his punch knocked down several trees but the MC casually caught it before?
So a human who just did a little training caught an Orc's club and suffered no damage?
We suddenly went from he's in his house stronger to he's face to face with an Orc, there was no transition, no mention of him travelling to go find one.
Three weeks with no rest days and he doubled his strength... There is a reason people take rest days, it's to recover from high-intensity training and to allow their bodies to heal, making them stronger.
Cliches are a bit of a tight rope, they either work well or make people lose interest.
Yeah but it says "I had no pets or animals", think its talking about not having farm animals
It is decent however I my suspicions it takes inspiration from where which is completely alright however it is common practice to state as such. I believe it takes inspiration from The Mech Touch. A novel about Ves Larkinson who wishes to become a mech pilot but doesn't and ends up designing mechs, the use of "exotics" are similar in both novels however that doesn't detract from the novel itself.
It really hasn't, his first fireball was red and could only take out a clearing. His current fireball can take out a cities front gate and is blue. Tell me brother, have you been reading all these chapters with your nose?
Have you never heard of a hand drill?
Remember that this like basically a public bus, 3 pound for a bus ticket while it's 5 pound for a phone repair, does that help you understand?
It only costs like 5RMB to make a 3kRMB gold fish, you forget he doesn't actually spend much to get the fish.