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Atomsphere

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2019-04-11 入りましたGlobal
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  • Atomsphere2 years ago
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    I quite like this. But Berengar needs to train them more. It was great when they sniped the scout. Should have just grabbed this guy here though.

  • Atomsphere2 years ago
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    Lol why didn't he run too? Before he could react... you ever see someone start running next to you? You got lots of time to ponder and still start running before miner-bro would get anywhere near far enough away to avoid self-harm.

  • Atomsphere2 years ago
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    These end of chapter musings. I see this in novels all the time. Where an author leaves their notes in but tries sell it like a cliffhanger from Rocky and Bullwinkle. The difference between these spoilers and Rocky and Bullwinkle are that most novels forget all of these promises. Even though the narrator spoiled the future, I have heavy doubts.

  • Atomsphere2 years ago
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    First of all. Censorship is terrible. But I'd expect nothing more from WN. Secondly, author-bro loves baby blue.

  • Atomsphere2 years ago
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    When people are livid, they're angry. When a part of their bodies are livid, it's discolored as if bruised or sickly. Every time I've seen it, it's people just mad in weird situations.

  • Atomsphere2 years ago
    に返信 DesolateRipper

    Right, I'm 30 in and probably giving up. Eat sleep train repeat.

  • Atomsphere2 years ago
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    I love how the girl responded. Insteaded of realizing that the bandits came back because her decision and feeling guilt like an adult, she was like "camouflage!" That's exactly how kids I know around her age would have responded.

  • Atomsphere2 years ago
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    Them level 3's already. It's been what 2 days to get a month worth of leveling in? Was there something I missed, like specialization greatly reducing experience cost?

  • Atomsphere2 years ago
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    The reading experience would improve greatly if the author ran a script on the text that deleted every sentence/paragraph that wasn't in quotations that ended in a question mark, ended in an exclamation point or started with the word "Yes". There's the usual stuff that you should expect from something on WN like missing prepositions but filtering out useless (word padding) rhetorical questions etc would go a long way. 5 stars for stability of updates because I didn't bother to look at the update history. 3 for story development because it's mostly just been describing simple things like walking and seeing with little interaction. Without much interaction with the world around the MC it's hard to get a handle on character design, so 3 again. Background seems okay, kind of useless transmigration from a world building perspective though since it's basically low tech to high tech + magic (still using paper money though). We haven't seen the advantage of transmigration other than the story not having to bother with a child being a child.

  • Atomsphere2 years ago
    に返信 Atomsphere

    Half not have.. w/e