the sky is black - Hiatus Damn, I'm In My Own Novel - In Progress https://www.patreon.com/drava
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sorry for the wait, next chapter is coming sometime this week! had stuff I needed to do.
Chapter tomorrow. Was resting up.
merry christmas! ty for reading!
just saw this, no harem :)
First of all, tysm for reading! i'm glad you find it interesting, and thank you for the review! I don't have a second opinion before I publish these chapters so constructive criticism is very appreciated! As for some of the points you made, I understand your view. I can't say much about the bro-con nature currently, and the edgy-ness about his past part is definitely a mess-up on my end, I wasn't trying to make him so much as edgy, but more mysterious. As for the lyrics that don't match, Leo really doesn't know any songs that could fit in any of his current situations other than the first one (the be alright one) nor does the princess know about Cinderella (That song was more for the readers, as most know who Cinderella is and how both Kathryn, and Cinderella are princesses it just matched), I believe that Leo and one of the inn customers had a chat about how his voice just soothes them, and they don't really have to understand the lyrics because he just calms them down. (So far other than the first song the rest haven't meant much, but it'll change in the future!) And for the mechanics of the skill/atmosphere part, that is my fault, I don't really know how to explain it if I'm being honest, hopefully as I write more it'll come naturally and I'll be able to easily detail it later. Now the only point I disagree with is the power of friendship part, I don't believe I've had any of those moments so far, nor do I particularly hope to write any of that (though if I have to, I probably will, but I'll try to avoid that as best as I can.) But overall, thank you for your review and criticism ! It really helps! I hope you can enjoy the story in the future if you continue to read :)
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