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ChakrasTiger

ChakrasTiger

Lv4
2018-11-03 入りましたUnited States
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  • ChakrasTiger
    ChakrasTiger2 years ago
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    Hiram is his other grandfather. That's William.

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  • ChakrasTiger
    ChakrasTiger2 years ago
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    Might want to change from ' to " because ' generally means he thinks it while " means he speaks it. Pretty confusing but besides that pretty good so far.

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  • ChakrasTiger
    ChakrasTiger2 years ago
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    good luck

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  • ChakrasTiger
    ChakrasTiger2 years ago
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    (Status) would be better

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  • ChakrasTiger
    ChakrasTiger2 years ago
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    affinity would be better than convergence. Unless it has more meaning later in the story

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  • ChakrasTiger
    ChakrasTiger2 years ago
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    Change health to vitality

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  • ChakrasTiger
    ChakrasTiger2 years ago
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    Hermione is an idiot. His parents died and he ran away so she thinks its old Snape? The only thing she knows for sure is that the timeline changed by him resigning from Hogwarts and running away (she doesn't know if his parents died in the previous timeline). Wouldn't it just be a completely different timeline? Genuinely amazed by the sheer stupidity.

  • ChakrasTiger
    ChakrasTiger2 years ago
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    no

  • ChakrasTiger
    ChakrasTiger3 years ago
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