Hultzy

All I can ask you author just please continue the story thank you.

I believe Rapunzel was a Brother's Grimm correct me if I'm wrong please.

she is in America unless it's a private bar that her family owns she would not be allowed to drink until she is 21 legally. No bar would serve knowingly anyone under the age of 21 in America because, they can get them in serious legal trouble.

This class should be considered battle mage rather than sword mage.

thank you for the Ram Jam knock off

wpre(swore*)

Overall it was a good story. From the excerpt you would think it would be about a new father surviving with his child without the mother in the picture. This story would have been a great as a slice of life slow-paced story. The pros: it showed the love of the father from the moment he lays his eyes on his child and that is a very good basis for a story. The cons: there's extremely fast paced and glosses over a lot of things that I believe would truly make the story much better if it was slow down.

I think this was a little too fast paced and how they resolve their issues in only one chapter even though you make reference to several months time lapse in the chapter.

Why would he question who his child's mother is if he had this letter all the time?

I wish more men in my country felt this way about their children. I know a lot do, but in my country the media shows that we care nothing for our children which is sad.