KageMugen
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KageMugen2yrに返信 Entrail_JII know... But it's not Scott free
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scot free - literally means without paying tax ...
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Author fcked up...
Back in Watisan City, Rean and Red were staying in a room prepared by the Hafel Clan in secret. They didn't have much to do, so they simply cultivated to pass the time. One must remember that once Rean and Roan were too far away, they couldn't use the Soul Gem System. That being said, neither of them could enter the Soul Gem Dimensional Realm. They couldn't even hear Sister Orb. All Rean and Roan could do was feel each other's presence. - KageMugen2yr発表
On a more realistic website I would give it less. Everything is very good and no glaring loopholes in the story. The universe is what it is and it's developing nicely. The most irksome thing about the book is that it is apparently being written on a tablet or mobile or has autocorrect so a lot of times instead of the right words there are similar words. For example work shippers instead of worshippers. In need of an editor badly otherwise a very nice and entertaining read. P. S. If you ask me nicely I will edit...
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Golden core...
この段落は削除されました。 - KageMugen2yrコメントCh 18 An Invitation From the Military! Raymond’s Plan!
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"Beats starwing or dying of thirst," Wei exclaimed as he swallowed before taking another bite. - KageMugen3yrに返信 Jkesse
bcoz the author could not remember the right expression or the word count..
Man Eating Treasure Box - KageMugen3yrコメント
Chance was behind
"The call was three guys, one of them had a gray suit." Rollins spoke as Chance as behind him. The two then heard sirens approaching. "That must be the backup and HAST, but we've got to keep moving." - KageMugen3yrコメント
smooth surface seats, even those in the back reserved for criminals.
Fermor's squad car had a smooth surface for its seats, including the ones at the back reserved for criminals alike. Chance was in the passenger seat, looking at the streets and the people passing by. The two were on the road within the Central area of Morissey. Buildings were colossal and close to each other. Very few of them were small and short. - KageMugen3yr発表
Reviewed after chapter 6: The Pros: Great grammar and pace World building is well developed and fused into the story The Cons: Characters seem a bit flat and accepting the story without any doubts or panic Characters who die so far leave you without any emotional attachment like cannon fodder Idiotic level 7 All in all it was entertaining so far.
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to get at the very least
"No, not yet." Hill replied. "But I'll be sure to talk to another. I heard Rosenthal's pulling all the stops to this Hellfire Arm crisis, at the very least get the Hellfire Arms gone. First he's getting the Havertons, and well, if really necessary, maybe the military. I just hope we don't have to get the World involved." - KageMugen3yrコメント
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"Any other Haverton been here before me?" Chance looked at the coroner - KageMugen3yrコメント
a field month ... Along I think you can lose...
"12, and this one happens to be unlucky 13." The coroner spoke in a shudder. "Since Dripper killings came back along I've had field month instead of a field day. "There's a likely chance the bodies were struck with Hellfire Arms, but I have a good feeling they're not from the same Arm."