Charizma

Lv6

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2017-09-28 入りましたAntarctica

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Charizma24 days ago
に返信 DaoistArbore
It is a problem. When you choose to read MTL, you accept atrocious writing. When you choose not to read MTL, you expect better.
The Runic Alchemist
幻想 · GlaringError
Charizmaa month ago
に返信 Arbogast_April
He is on someone else's property. A property he knows is owned by a man he hasn't met yet, and he responds to a simple and extremely common question with hostility. That is "how". This wasn't worth remembering, so I have forgotten it, but I'd bet he did other idiotic things earlier too.
'The hell with that attitude, man? Who the hell asks someone for their name like that? Learn some manners.' Arthur rolled his eyes.
My SSS-Rank Class Is Blood Monarch!
幻想 · Frost_Bite8
Charizma3 months ago
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This guy's morality is all over the place.
"At least, even if you don't know how to keep your guards in line, you know how to punish them," I told the man.
Poison God's Heritage
東方 · Biako
Charizma3 months ago
に返信 CanorBrando
It's a decent story at best. Spelling and grammar get a solid 1. Character and world building get a 2, arguably a 3 for character building. Though at chapter 32 the MC seems to be getting dumber. Power system gets a 3, maybe 4.
Poison God's Heritage
東方 · Biako
Charizma3 months ago
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Except he agreed to a pill for each chore and already paid one pill.
"Right, that was our deal, here you go," I replied as I handed him two pills and one of the random spirit herbs I gathered."
Poison God's Heritage
東方 · Biako
Charizma4 months ago
に返信 ThespianGamr
I've already let this fall from my mind, so you might be right. I do recall my point was to tell the author that pulling new skills or items out of nowhere is not a good method of development.
Summoning his spear which lit up the area even more Damian channeled his mana into it, making it's flames go to the point of extreme hot white. That was one more thing Damian had learned while tinkering with his magical weapon and practicing everyday with it. There were no runic circles though, Damian wouldn't even have tried reaching deep into his weapon's structure with his mana strings if he didn't have the mana sensing ability. A thin vein of almost nonexistent mana was in it, Damian could feel. So one day he just tried doing it and supplied his own mana to the point of overflowing the weapon and the flames around the tip got hotter and hotter. The handle and the iron build of his spear was also blazing hot but for some reason it just never affected his skin. He felt neither warm nor cold just plain nothing, just like any other normal sword handle or spear.
The Runic Alchemist
幻想 · GlaringError
Charizma4 months ago
に返信 Novaburn4972
Apparently so. Wormhole, spear-torch, remote activation, ranged mana sense with which he has been memorizing many different mana signatures... Damian has grown up quite well in the time skip... oh wait. :p
Both knights and some others whom Damian had not noticed yet were thrown behind in tremendous wind pressure, crashing into the support pillar in front of the room. They were second rankers though and such measly damage was nothin to them. But Damian did not do it to hurt them, just as the first knight got up and tried to rush in again a huge thick wall of solid dirt covered the whole doorframe locking Damian and Anthony inside. The wall also wouldn't be able to hold them for long as the heavy blows were already crashing on the wall orchestrated by the group of knights. Damian quickly looked back and saw Anthony in position with the window open, he immediately activated the [Wormhole] spell and waited with baited breath seeing the black runic circle slowly forming with each second dragging behind.
The Runic Alchemist
幻想 · GlaringError
Charizma4 months ago
に返信 GlaringError
I must disagree with you. It is your work, but that is exactly how it should go. Him pulling out skills and powers right as they are needed, but never mentioned before, comes across as, and is, plot armor. The wormhole came from nowhere and is going to create so many plot holes unless you use it a lot. The spear having such an ability makes sense, but when did Damian have time to study it? This is just my opinion, but I feel you are rushing the story and it is detrimental. Having a few chapters detailing him practicing with the spear would have been beneficial. I've read a lot and I have seen many promising LNs be ruined by the pulling-a-rabbit-out-of-a-hat trope.
Summoning his spear which lit up the area even more Damian channeled his mana into it, making it's flames go to the point of extreme hot white. That was one more thing Damian had learned while tinkering with his magical weapon and practicing everyday with it. There were no runic circles though, Damian wouldn't even have tried reaching deep into his weapon's structure with his mana strings if he didn't have the mana sensing ability. A thin vein of almost nonexistent mana was in it, Damian could feel. So one day he just tried doing it and supplied his own mana to the point of overflowing the weapon and the flames around the tip got hotter and hotter. The handle and the iron build of his spear was also blazing hot but for some reason it just never affected his skin. He felt neither warm nor cold just plain nothing, just like any other normal sword handle or spear.
The Runic Alchemist
幻想 · GlaringError
Charizma4 months ago
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"first ranker"? You have got to properly explain the power system and stick to it. As it is, Damian's strength make this feel more of a power-up fantasy than fantasy world with magic.
Damian tapped lightly on heavily breathing Anthony's hand to gesture him to stop wasting time and get going. Damian also took few steps forward when suddenly he notice two mana signatures that were not supposed to be there. One was a first ranker just like him but a very familiar one and another was the biggest mana energy signature in the whole building, Damian did not notice it because it was on the other side of the building before. Right now they were right on top of Damian somewhere on 4th or 5th floor. Those were reserved for commanders and high ranking knights only.
The Runic Alchemist
幻想 · GlaringError
Charizma4 months ago
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Where did this come from?
A black runic magic circle appeared in front of the mana beast-skin parchment and connected another point in space which was 10 meters ahead of it. Damian had succeeded in at least applying the [Wormhole] spell on the paper with pre-entered distance, of course it made the spell crippled in fight with it's slow activation and predictable opening but it had many more application in which Damian was happy to use it as such. Wasting his mana for no reason was not an efficient thing to do.
The Runic Alchemist
幻想 · GlaringError