DJ87

What happened to the daily mission and leveling up?

I feel like there's a disharmony in the story. Could it be that the author changed the storyline halfway? What did the system meant when he commented about the way the MC talked about the father? The MC never really talked about the father positively in the first place. I also noticed some other discrepancies in the stories that made the storyline a bit rough and not smooth flowing.

Maybe its's just a typo, but shouldn't the title be 'An Alone Moment' ?

There's a small hidden clause there..... (First kiss with you that is)

Of course not. Reader's immersion to the story is important. However, it should be more interesting. Since your MC is not a clueless newbie but someone who was reincarnated, use it to your advantage. Slip a bit of flashback or side story to how he gained the knowledge/skill, or his experience mastering skill under his master's tutelage. Add a bit of humor or jokes to make the lengthy explanation easy on the eye. For example, when the two elders were trying to break the array, slip some humor about how the array almost burned his beard, or instead of merely stating the darkness is hard to combine with any elements, try putting some experience of how he almost died by combining it with other elements before. Then again, it's just my own personal view. I hope you won't be offended by my comments. I know it's not easy to write a good story. It's just my own personal preference in a story. Other readers might like your way of writing. Keep up the good work and you'll definitely get there. Apologies if my comments offended you

The book started really good at first. The ideas were interesting and engaging at first. However, as the story progresses, I feel the author is becoming too long winded in explaining simple things that won't really matter in the long run. Author also likes to overexplain learning of skills that won't really be useful or meaningful in the future as well. Sadly I have to drop this story after 72 chapters.

He has got to be one of the dumbest MC in history. You know that there's two guys stronger than you, and yet you're willing to risk losing your precious immortal qi and risk endangering yourself in a prolonged fight. Killing/disabling your enemies as fast as possible is always the best way to achieve victory.

Do they have Jolls Joyce too?

I believe you mean,It was so addictive

First and foremost, the idea of having a system for this kind of setup is unique and new. However, there is an over reliance on the MC having the system to justify whatever that happens in the story. I mean, come on, how did he suddenly get the share of a Fortune 500 company. And there is not even a scene of the MC being surprised by the system or any other explanation or goals of the system. If the author had explain that the MC is familiar with a system through novel etc, then it makes sense. But the MC is someone who had been struggling his whole life and usually people who struggled had problem trusting something especially when it is too good to be true. It had potential but author is too much in a hurry to write that a lot of important events such as discovery of the system is neglected.