Watergate_LAW

you can read previous chapter/s author's note.

Oh, he can continue. Nothing against him, really; at the end of the day, it is just a fanfiction. Only, it's common courtesy to ask permission(from the og author of the fanfiction), and I'm just here verifying since it was a bit of a familiar reading experience, turns out I've read it a long long long time ago also.

This is "Ambition of a God" by Soluxy posted in fanfiction.net on the year 2018 with the latest update last 2021. Have you obtained permission to repost it here?

Your char probably need to modify this restriction (like Kurapika did with his Judgement Chain and Chain Jail). As is, this restrict Kamui into purely defensive use, limiting its combat usability. (A 1s use = 1s cd, 2=2, 4=4, etc. exchange) is very inflexible and is not worth the risk to use in combat as you cannot go tangible to intangible and vice versa in a moments notice.

Disclosing an ability best hidden towards unrelated parties is really an unwise move. It is for character development? The way i see it, the ability is best kept secret, specially, since it's so situational, crucial and a last-resort surprise type ability.

You" could use some application of pronouns to avoid being redundant. Though, kidding aside there are no major error (quite literally as "pronouns" are considered a minor word class category) in your piece, per se, aside from the improper and lacking use of pronouns throughout you writings. If you could improve on pronoun application, specially that of personal pronouns, e.g., (He/Him/His/Himself - Masculine) (she/her/herself - Feminine) then that will be a huge improvement.

Fisher Tiger was betrayed by the people form Koala's hometown, they called the marine due to knowing somehow that the fishman are journeying to return koala to her hometown. He was ambushed by marines but escaped the entrapment with severe bleeding. He died due to blood loss, he could have survived, had he not refused the human blood for transfusion.

Maybe it's better if this is phrased like this. "A fish is a fish, What did you expect?

That's great! Though its need some patchwork to read uninterrupted but definitely recommend this to anyone just for the idea and execution of the story alone. PS: How i wish to be able to speak and read in all languages so i could read any one piece fanfictions like a native.

Though translation could use a bit of polishing, it doesn't really stain the great of a fanfic this is. It's totally a different take of character/attitude (specially luffy) and the indepth storyline in east blue, though its bad at depicting the environment (or they're just no interesting things/places on east blue). Btw please continue translating ;)