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What the hell is 'Earl Dervish'? I'm guessing it's supposed to be 'Starter', but how do you end up with Earl Dervish? Could you not even be bothered to edit the chapters after MTLing them?
The story itself isn't great and just feels like a standard power fantasy with an OP protagonist, but it's somewhat readable. Unfortunately the spelling and grammar are both terrible. I actually got a headache trying to read this mess. I genuinely can't understand how this story has more than 4 stars. I've seen MTLed Chinese novels with better spelling and grammar.
The hell is 'Earl Dervish'? Do you not edit the chapters?
The MC really p*sses me off. He's always a passive coward who doesn't take the initiative in anything and just spends most of his time whining about his situation. After becoming a Demi-Servant, he doesn't take any time actually figuring out what he can and can't do with his new abilities. Dude, doesn't have an original though in his head and only does something when he's pushed into it. OG Shirou has his issues as well, but compared to this pathetic, waste of space OC-Insert, he's practically perfect.
I can't say I'm a fan of introducing characters from other fandoms like Kuroka. I guess I'll have to see if this is the only time or not. If more characters from other fandoms show up, I'll stop reading this story.
The last chapter was published more than 20 days ago. Is this story abandoned?
Bruh, Technician only increases the moves power by 50%, so Bullet Punch would increase from 40 to 60, not 80. The Author apparently can't do basic math...
The hell is a Pokémon Illustrated book? Just say PokeDex. Please take some time to actually proofread and edit the chapters to make them easier to read.
A somewhat entertaining story. The translation is occasionally quite rough. The MC has moments where he just comes across as an asshole. Finally the MCs system feels completely superfluous, since it barely shows up and most of the recourses the MC gets from it are things he could've gotten himself. It feels like the author included the system just because novels with systems are popular and the story could've easily gone the same way without it.
So far it's a very entertaining fanfiction. I love that the MC actually utilizes his knowledge of the manga, anime fillers and movies to find and grab opportunities to strengthen himself and his village, instead of being passive like other SI MCs, who desperately try to preserve canon. It's also good to see that the MC doesn't bootlick Konoha. I've seen several fanfics where the MC was born in a shinobi village other than Konoha, but still acted like they were from Konoha and cared about it more than their own village...