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I have been been reading this series for a while and I am just gonna say it’s really good and I cried a lot
I look forwRd to every chapter! (Despite my tendency to stockpile chapters to binge read.)
Ohhh a new person takes up the mantle of Meng Hao!!!
Might be best to just say ‘wu longs free hand made’
Would she even know about the search party? Besides dont forget she has been losing sleep cause of archer lol
Ah this chapter broyght a smile to my face and made me laugh. Comparing the intital rocky start to the smooth flow of today, i must say you have outdone yourself daoist green onion! Keep ul the good work lol!
“Took off her tights and panties off” you got a redundant “off” here lol
Ur welcome.
Never looked at the title until j saw you author note but i could *FEEL* the tension in the room rising with each word said. So i believe you did a great job!
Might want to specify who is saying what here by using this format: “Bla bla” x said. “Bla bla bla” Y said. Dont just leave it bland, add some descriptions of what they are doing or trying to do as well like this: “Bla bla.” X said while walking ahead. “Bla bla bla” Y said as they chased after X.