The Anti Hero Mage

A talking system automatically caused my score to drop by 2 points. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

Bro can you write something that use logic?

So he is a government agent Who kills people And criminals it's his job in real world And he has time to read DC comics And be angry 😡 at fictional villains and heros In a comic Bro like what is this

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it's just a face slapping fic with superhero elements.

The mc is a hypocrite, he let's innocent people die for his own agenda after yapping about how bad other heroes are, he does many good things and all that but he seems to be against all of the GCPD for no real reason besides their corruption as if that was a reason all of them deserved death

I can't say I like it. The story is a self insert from what I got from it, most the chapters I read (I've read up to chapter 6) are just him insulting police or a hero. We don't actually see any development of his powers. IDK why he has a system as normally they are used to track progress but as we don't see any of the progress he probably cpuld just take it out the story so that he doesn't have the double wish at the start. Other issues.No world building. No character development (that isn't instant).Inaccurate characters (they said they were on earth 22). Character manipulates his dads mind.Gets innocents killed by chapter 4 intentionally.Can't think of anything I like about it.

It's a half decent story.The world and the aspects of the world the author includes makes it worth a read. The author includes quite alot of aspects from dc comics into his story which other authors either neglect or cant be bothered to add.This is one of the main positives of this fanfic. Including good plot points from the comics.The things that make the good less apparent is the obvious hatred the author has for dc heroes. While it fits to a certain degree due to the moral compass of the mc, it goes too far at certain points.By this I mean the mc constantly calling wonder woman a 'sl*t' over and over again.I wouldn't find fault in this if it wasn't for the fact that the mc never justified him saying this and the fact that at some point all the mc has been talking about is how he wants to have multiple wives.To hammer in the point that he really wants multiple wives the author kills half the male population as a plot point in order for countries world wide to allow men to marry multiple women. Literally out of nowhere as the mc was in another dimension when it happened.And while the grammar isnt mtl level of bad it gets worse over time. By this I mean that while you can see some faults through the first maybe 40 chapters, after some point it becomes dribble. Still not horrible, but enough to where it feels like a child wrote the story.An example of this would be when the mc says things to the effect of " you have a bad mustache" while fighting sinestro. It wouldn't have been bad if he didn't say it over and over again on repeat in contiuously worse grammar sometimes saying it 3 times in the same sentance. But thats just being nitpicking on my part.All in all its mediocre, its worth a read if you have nothing else to read. Or if you like fanfics where the mc kills.p.s. the author really should add the romance and harem tag if you're gonna add it to the story. Especially with how the mc will most likely go to the marvel universe after some dc arcs

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"Blaaaaaghh. Superman, God's righteous man. Thinks he can have peace without war. You know...

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Not bad. I wouldn’t say it’s one of the best fanfics I’ve read but it is something you can use to pass the time if you have nothing else going on👍

Best read so far.Continue with the chapters.Love your work 👍

You know, this story isn't bad. Sure, I saw a few grammar errors, but besides that, not much else. Good job. Keep up the good work Author!

Please keep posting. This fic is fun to read

people, you can throw in chapter 1 of this author’s panos

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Keep up the good work.Don't abandon please.

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