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ReWorld: Draft Only

作者: UelUel
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  • 37 章
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  • 4.7
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  • NO.200+
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概要

They're the ones who will look up at the sky and reach out their hands. The ones who will have the urge to jump as they look down at the depth of the abyss. Those who will take the first step without any hesitation as they look far off the edge of the horizon. Someone who will gaze at the Moon and dream of an adventure, dares to leave the Earth, and conquer every Dungeons. This is the story of their adventures. Those brave Adventurers, peculiar Magicians, valiant Knights, and proud Valkyries. Stories of Humans, Half-Race, and Demi-Humans along with their Sub-Spirits. Tales of Reincarnation and Dungeon along with their Dungeons' Keepers. Their stories as they live their lives on Earth. Their stories as they traverse the sky from dungeon to dungeon. Their stories as they dream to reach the Moon. Their Days of Dungeons from Earth to Moon.

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目次
0 :Auxiliary Volume
1 :Soul_Ember
2 :World_Fragment

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LordSputnik
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Overall, this is a hard one to judge. It doesn't read like a linear story; it reads more like a collection of gags than a linear story. More details are below. The Good: It is high-energy, and the comedy bits are done quite well. We are given solid details about our trio of little girls, and it follows the common "Cute girls doing cute things" kinda trope. The prologue itself was done very well. Info dumps are also handled well, and overall, the author appears to have experience. The Bad: It is very hard to follow. The tenses jump sometimes and then settle on a strange first-person perspective that frankly doesn't work well with me. The dialogue is very fast, and I frequently lose track of who is talking. Why so many underscores? Every single underscore felt like a speed bump. Underscores serve no purpose in grammar, they were used to underline words on old typewriters. I feel like this story isn't developing towards anything, but I might be a little unfair on this point because I've only read up to chapter 11. This felt like a collection of skits mixed with a bunch of unnecessary line breaks, periods, and underscores. With a lack of story progression, I can understand a lack of character development, but it still doesn't sit well with me. The Neutral: This style of writing doesn't work well with me so I might be a little unfair in my review. I personally do not know what the plot of this story is. It feels like a slice-of-life comedy dungeon-diving mashup that actually does kinda work. I have a feeling the target of this story is young teen and preteen kids so it doesn't mesh well with me, but I'm sure others will find it enjoyable. The only advice I can think of is to consider the readers and try to work it out from our perspective, but honestly, you already have a style, and it works well with your target audience. Don't change your story to try and appeal to others like me and I'm glad to see you keeping at it!

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