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Prototype: DO NOT READ

作者: NickEND
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My saviour; the cursed lord.

An excited squel could be heard under the small bed with minimal covering.A squel of pure joy."Elly!Elly!", said a gorgeous woman with deep chocolate brown eyes and Licious blonde locks. The little girl under the bed,Elly covered her mouth with her hand to silence the uncontrollable giggles erupting from her due to excitement. A huge "BANG!" was heard in the room and a group of muscular, beastly looking men entered through the now fallen door.The blonde haired woman shrieked and slightly backed away with a ghastly looking face. Elly remained under the bed shocked at what was happening around her.One of the men grabbed the woman, hoisting her on his shoulder.She struggled, kicking, screaming and thrashing the man. One of the other men chuckled and said,"I'd suggest you behave,the master doesn't do well with brats like you.".The woman looked towards the unknown man, with tears in her eyes,she bit her bottom lip and stopped fighting. The beastly men left the Heralds sisters humble abode with the oldest of the sisters in their captivity.Eleanor left her hiding place and rushed to the window with tears in her eyes and no words.She looked at her sister as she also did the same. The two sisters making a vow to find each other and reunite one day ***************** And this is how the youngest of the two,Eleanor Heralds,found herself with high ranking "Cursed Lord" Lord Marcus Valtroose in the cruel world ruled by the cruel and ruthless night creatures and even crueler human beings. ***************

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1st: Needs an introduction. You don't drop out new terms like zeus pooping out new kids. 2: Some grammar errors, but overall decent 3: some weird punctuation here and there. 4: Some ideas should be extended Good start. If you feel like you don't like the story and don't feel confident, ask a friend to beta-read. There are some other smaller issues but my webnovel app keeps crashing when I leave reviews and comments so i'll keep it short. Great start tho

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