Persona: Hero x Villain System

I liked it it was vary vary refreshing I would like to to read more the whole hero villain thing is awesome keep it up 😍 It reminds me of the arrow with steet wise smarts unlike the arrow show were it's got it's Rich boy bules type

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Hello, Unfortunately I see signs of Hiatus. I have no doubt that this quite interesting Fan-fic is going to be ( has been ) dropped. Enjoy reading those few chaps and then go cry.

it's a pretty good read with interesting premise. The author does need to work on his grammar and get an editor or proofreader, some paragraphs look as if lines were skipped, it also gets confusing to tell who's talking.

I quite linked these first 5 chapters. I'm sorry to see that it's been a month since the last update. The story has potential, its fluently written and reads naturally. I recommend the author to continue the story.

This is one of the best Marvel fanfic I have ever read most of them are just painful to read the concept is great and unique just a few grammar problems.

The story is pretty great, it’s refreshing, well written. The background is great but my God this anger is absolutely useless. I would have thought that the system would have erased the anger of the pit but no and that causes only problems. The way that the mc follows is not good and it would only cause problems. I like his neutrality, I hope he never becomes a villain but he’s on the edge right now. Bruce Wayne was able to hold his public character without stumbling, but the mc only stumbled. This fight in Midtown was an example of the consequences of his lack of control, I hope that with the previous persona it will stop, I have the impression that the system controls his emotions. This anger is not natural. There is the problem with Kamar taj. You forget that they don’t care about anything that happens inside the planet and that is not a being that will destroy the planet itself like Dormamu, The Ancien One didn’t care about Loki or anything. I hope his York identity is never mixed up with mutants and vigilantism. Todd has succeeded in Dc as well as Clark, Bruce and others, Red Hood is on the edge of the villain, he could never have a civilian life if it comes out, could not own a company. Other than that, the story is really great, I advise to read it

tem muito potencial contanto que o autor não abandone tem uma boa chance de estar no topo desse site. Claro se o autor conseguir equilibrar o protagonista o bastante pra ele não ser considerado hipocrita, que geralmente é o erro mais comum em fanfics com karma bom e karma ruim.

For me, as far as the story goes, it was cool at the beginning but became lame later on. The writing quality is alright. Few mistakes here and there. I won't get into the details that make me think it gets lame since I feel like it's just because I came in with expectations. Needless to say, those expectations were met only in the beginning really. Then they weren't, and I got disappointed by where the story is heading. There's an audience for this. Unfortunately for me, it just isn't me.

in short here is my review and first it was good but later it got annoying and ridiculous

one of the best novel I have read so far. hope you will update the chapters in future . love your work ......[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

This is well written, and enjoyable at times. But I feel like the main character just stumbles around at time. He also seems to go out of his way to get involved with things he doesn’t need to get involved with. I like the fact that he has plans, but then he’ll make a decision that kind of throw a lot of plants out of the window. This is a good story, if you like the marvel comics universe more than the cinematic. It does have in a lot of different characters that we normally don’t read in fanfic. I think if you enjoy a good character, who’s aligned more towards good and being a heroes than this is a story you would like. If you’re like me, and want someone who doesn’t care about others only focuses on his goals. This story may at times frustrate you.

love it. are you going to make new chapters or should I stop waiting?

A well-prepared backstory and a great character sketch. I hope you don't drop this fan-fiction author. It's a good read and has a great origin story. Thank you for sharing this amazing fan-fiction with us.

It is good novel i liked it pls never drop Good luck😀😀😀👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

The story is excellent and very creative. I would recommend others read it. My only Gripe is the updated speed, which isn't bad, but it feels like we are left on a cliffhanger for long time.

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"No hay fuerza en la carne, solo debilidad". "No hay constancia en la carne, solo decadencia". "No hay certeza en la carne sino en la muerte"