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PEARLS

作者: F_R_A
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The Trying Times of An Ex-War General

“Khylon Galdiun!” The leader harshly bangs his staff down on the floor like the prop was a gavel. He did not appreciate the theatrics. “Not only have you lied about your identity, but you have even tried to steal one of our sacred relics!” … excuse me? What ‘sacred relic’ rubbish was this?? Khylon carefully kept his face blank. In the face of his disbelief, however, the leader howled, “Acting like a fool will not lighten your sentencing!” And then the older man angrily waved the tip of his staff towards one of the smaller crowds. “Young Fang, step forward!!” The man from Ancient Earth takes one large step, driving himself out of the quickly-growing crowd, and politely calls, “Yes, Leader?” Simear, the current Head of the Amatahri, points his righteous stick straight at the kneeling Khylon. “Did this man attempt to steal your.. mecha?” The moment this particular inquiry leaves his wrinkly lips, Khylon’s eyebrows shoot up to his hairline. Stealing—a mecha..? Wasn’t he just taking back what was originally his?? Khylon can’t help but scrunch his nose and stare at Fang Xiao rather weirdly. Hey. This guy was the real robber, right.. Fang Xiao sighs, put upon. “Yes,” he ends up admitting, much to the shock of the crowd if the loud gasps and surprised shouts were anything to go by. “Silence!” Simear demands, and when the sound eventually dampens to a suitable volume, he continues to bellow; “Khylon! For your despicable plot against one of your weaker tribesmen, you are hereby banished from the Great Rerawlen forest!” “Leader, wait—!” “This can’t be true!?” “No way!!” Of course, there’s many who verbally protest, but in the end no one actually steps forward to stop the guards as they drag him away. Khylon doesn’t put up a fight. It was no use and, to be honest, he could probably just escape from the ‘jail cell’ anyway. But still. Despondently, he can’t help but wonder— —just how did he end up like this..? _______________________________________ In the entirety of the explored galaxies, the name ‘Khylon Galdiun’ was, and still is, probably the one most well-known. His whole career was laid out in the Public Imperial gallery for all to see and admire. It was actually more impressive for someone to not have heard of him. Firstly, he belonged to an infamous clan primarily known for their Spatial-orientated Evolutionary Skillset(EVOS) where most—if not all—members from that large “family” tended to enter under the military branch of the Galactic Union. Khylon also wasn’t any different from his kin in this regard, and before he was even 30yrs old, he had already become a highly decorated General with the freedom to do as he pleased. After that, life was great. .. but in the end all it took was one wrong mission for it to all come crashing down. Now stuck on a backwaters and painfully primitive planet after falling through an unknown wormhole; it takes all aspects of Khylon’s training—and barely-there prodigal skill—just to stay alive. ___ #strongtoweak #tribes #uknownpower #lying #revenge #pettymc

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Heyoo! Nice to see a fellow Pakistani Webnovel Enthusiast! Although I see you're new to this side of literature, new authors who wanna try out web novels are always welcome in the community as they can bring in something new and unique to the table, rather than rehashing the same old tropes in a new context. I've gone through the Novel (currently 9 chapters as of writing this) and will be giving you some feedbacks and criticisms from the point of view of someone who's been in the web novel sphere for a quite a while now and is well versed in English as a first language as well as classic literature, if that's alright with you. If that isn't and if any of my feedback feels insulting to you, you can tell me quietly and I'll remove it. I'm not here to offend you or make you feel bad for trying something new and quit.OK, now that we've got that out of the way. I'll tell you what you're doing right. like I mentioned before, since you're new. you're also bringing something new to the table. At least from what I can tell, you're not outright copying a story you read just with a self insert character this time. which is something that alot of beginners end up doing subconsciously. So your plot being unique is your first plus.Secondly, the way you brought in the classic Muqalma/dialogue format that pak schools love to teach, and implemented it into your story ch 2 onwards is something I've yet to see in Webnovel formats tbh. Ofcourse, novelty doesn't automatically make something better, that's something that depends on how the author takes advantage of the new gates this novel method opens for them, and how good the execution of the method itself is. simply being out of the box isn't enough, you need to justify it with competence.In your case, the play dialogue format has some advantages and disadvantages.The advantage is that the conversation is uninterrupted, snappy and quick. Less fluff for the reader to go through.Disadvantages are that it's a little bit less readable without extra formatting. you'll have to BOLD or CAPITALISE your names so that they stand out. Also you can't show emotions in which the dialogue is said, without fully committing to the Scriptwriter/Play Dialogue formatting. for example:Usually what you'll see is:Max replied shakily, "Yeah.. sure". "Nice!" exclaimed Sarah. Happy that she got what she wanted.If you want to convey the same message in your style. you'd probably have to do something like this everytime.MAX: (Voice Shaking) "Yeah.. sure."SARAH: (Excited) "Nice!"Sarah was happy she got what she wanted.-------------Both are abit different and achieve slightly different results in how the emotion is delivered to the reader.On a slightly different but related note, as I've pointed out in one of the paragraphs, your Current usage of brackets seems abit scattered. There are many a times where you'd be better off just replacing those with a comma as it would seem more natural. Especially in the paragraph format parts that occur outside the Dialogue. Going with regular conventions might be key.Other than that you're killing it, I'd recommend getting someone you know who's more experienced in English Literature, to be your proofreader or editor. Simply having another pair of eyes go through it can help you avoid do many silly typos or grammatical errors. Alternatively, if you can't find someone, you could always come back to old chapters preferably once you've written at least 20 chapters and rework them with the new and improved sense you have after writing so many chapters.That's another thing you'll grow to love about writing web novels. You'll feel yourself improve overtime. Especially when you come back to one you wrote a couple years ago.So Keep Going on this journey. I wish you the best of luck! Happy Writing!

LeonardD
LeonardDLv2LeonardD

Really good your style is really unique and I like it keep going

Cosmic_nerd
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Girl you really overdid yourself. This is absolutely beautiful. You're such a precious addition to the writing community <3

Rahat_Nadeem
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I like your storyIt's quite nice and I love the characters

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