MHA: The Birth Of A Vampire

Hey, the author here. I just wanted to mention that I am a novice writer, this is my first story and it's nice to see people reading it, I hope you enjoy it. If you have any constructive criticism I will be happy to read it to improve. Ummm I should also mention that English is not my first language, so I hope you forgive me if there are any spelling or grammatical errors. If you want to support me you can go to my pat *** / acoms and even if you cannot support me financially I will be very grateful if you give a good review to the fanfic and give me a stone of power.

Hello, it's me again, I just wanted to say that if you are a new reader I wanted to tell you the following. I have already edited the first chapters, which were very poorly translated. So I hope you give it a chance if you thought not to read it because of the criticism about the bad translation. I also did a small rewrite in the prologue so if you have already read it, I recommend that you do it again so that you understand what the future plot will be like. Thanks for your attention. I hope you enjoy my book.

It had potential, but I do not think of this as a good story. The chapter until now are just drama, MC is child orphan, living in an orphanage. They go to hospital, MC has vampire quirk. "Oh no, he has a villain quirk", MC is shunned (worse than manhua lol), MC get attacked by plot and fight back, scared orphanage manager call governement to take him, MC is taken (let himself be taken even thought he half-knew it) to brainwashing etablishment masquerading as a "evil quirk retablishment institute" or something like that. MC meet Himiko (lol). MC wants Himiko, so MC become Himiko's friend, then more than friend. MC gets tortured for plot (bad guy trying to brainwash yadayada). MC plan to escape with Himiko. The... drama is kinda pointless, MC can't stop thinking he will kill everyone, get revenge and all that, but I think it will takes years before it take place, and the story is goign forward at snail pace. It takes time. And pointless drama. It would be so much, so MUCH MORE BETTER (in my opinion) if MC was shown directly in his adulthood, or teens. We would know MC as a villain, then little by little reveal thing on him (like in Classroom of the elites) I do not think you will like this story, you can still give it a try

weakest vampire i have heard of cant he even control ppl he bites so whats makes himancestor of vampires and shoulndt vampires have basic mind manipulation at least and immortality like dafuq he is more like weakened ghoul than vampire he is worst vampire like dafuq i dont think author knows whats vampire and in mha he gets clapped in secs whit those powers

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Writing: Bad grammar, Wrong quotations, mistakes with MC's gender. Story: Forced plot with society pulling every strings to turn MC evil......from dumb matron to mad scientist. Character: MC's goal is catching waifus and naking harem lol....he could have been in a different situation entirely if he made ROB's help wisely. Updates: Good updating stability. World : MHA verse

Author makes regular mistakes with, he, you, I. Author changes perspectives randomly in the middle of paragraphs. A little proofreading would be adviced. First time ever seeing someone make those mistakes.

the only annoying/bad thing I can say so far is that you mix up he and she a lot other than that so far so good even if the he she mix up is annoying as frick

I read till cjapter 9 1/2 Ok so first of all the writing quality sucks. Biggest problem being that the author just keeps mistaking he and she and all the other forms. The worst part is that he doesn’t correct it. The story had potential with the vampire quirk but the orphanage was very cliche. The character is pretty annoying especially since he just saw Himiko and just thought things like “we were made for each other” while he has the mind of an adult and she is around 6 yrs old. This just made me stop since the writing quality is dog sh** and the mc also sucks

I don't usually write review but I gotta say the idea is good and have a lot of potential but the author make him soo weak and the writing quality is trash.

it's a good book but there is lots of bad grammar and quotes don't go where there vampires some are weak but I don't wanna be mean but it's a good book[img=recommend]

The character is annoying he has all these negative things happen to him and all he does is complain in his mind about it not even bothering to correct misunderstandings that are easily explainable even if they negatively impact him. THE GRammar is the worst part of this whole novel. And some thing seem extremely forced. Dats it.

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the writing quality is adequate but it feels like its either written by a 14 year old or a person learing english right now. the amount of minor grammar mistakes are infuriating. Moreover, is he dumbing himself down when he talks to himko so she can understand? cause i can see that happening. this whole story is second rate at best

I have not read much of MHA, but I love the subject of vampires, so I started reading this book. It has some spelling errors, but the story is incredible, besides that in the last chapters there are almost no errors. Very entertaining to read. HIGHLY RECOMMENDED.

I dropped this fanfic at the chapter 25 from too many stupid decisions the author wrote that the MC made. The way the main character acts is little too forced and not logical, he always coming to the logical conclusion a few steps too late. For me the concept and idea of the story was good but the execution could have been a lot better, so read at your own discretion.

Me gusta tu historia pero odio la personalidad de tu Mc osea no tengo nada con tu personaje pero no me imagino un puto vampiro actuando haci yo me lo imaginaba cinico sarcastico frio que no mostrari facilmente su amor pero si se enojaria mucho Hay una novela en la que puedes vasarte para la personalidad que te digo Tu mandame un mensaje si te interesa <[Dato curioso los niños en japon se bañan juntos si son familiares En los baños publicos los niños van con los padres Si el niño es menor de 7 puede entrar al baño de mujeres acompañado de la madre o hermana Las madres bañan a los hijos e hijas Pero es mal visto que el padre se bañe con la hija La edad de consentimiento sexual en japon es de 13 años]>

sooooo dificult to read! It's just to hard to make sense as you read, be it the way it's writen or the MC choices... not recommended at all.