I Became a Pawn Shop Owner

Writing quality is poor, there are a lot of gramatical errors which make it so the reader has to read things multiple times to know what is going on, the overal story idea and story progression is not bad though. If the author could fix their writing of the english language then it would get a much higher rating.

all I can say is, good concept but lackluster writing. The 'owner of a magical shop' troupe is interesting but the phrasing of the words and grammar pulls one out of the story I really like the concept so if you want me to edit some chaps for free hit me up on discord: Daoist RedSnow#2180

Another shop owner type of system novel! I'll give 5 stars on the concept itself and full marks for encouraging the author to not drop it even though some errors have been made.

This one is rough, the grammar issues are bad enough to ruin the story. I find it hard to even follow the story developement when I'm trying to figure out what the author is even trying to say.

Okay it mostly boils down to two main issues. 1: The writing is awful. I am referring to grammar and spelling. 2: It premiums at 20 chapters. This limits any insights into most all categories in the review so I defualt to low ratings because in the first twenty chalters nothing is given out which makes this story worth buying more chapters except the genre itself. In fact there is the aforementioned poor writing which makes you think twice about EVER giving the story your money. TL;DR : Dont waste Your time on an early premium story with poor writing unless you have absolutely nothing else to spend fast passes on. 1.8/5

Fix your early chapters bro, couldn't handle it due to bad english, typos, and grammar problems besides it might help boost your novel to some extent.

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This is a pretty decent magical shop owner novel. The characters aren’t terrible and the setting is your usual cultivation world. My one complaint Is that the grammar can be painful to read in most of the chapters Ive read so far. Hopefully it improves.

Copy and paste of the other system store owner novels, except worse. First off, the writing quality is abysmal. It's to the point where it's hardly legible. Theres a couple different qualities of MTL's, and this is arguably one of the worst. The writing quality outright ruins the novel to begin with. The story development, character design, and world background are extremely poor. I can't say much about the world background since I didn't read that far, but based on how much this is copying from other novels, I can only give it two stars. Characters? Same as other system store novels. First customer is a young master who incidentally buys seemingly overpriced goods and is amazed about how good they are, thus leading to new customers. Story development? Well, I'm just going to skip over that, just a blatant copy. Overall, this novel is pretty substandard, even for this site.

good concept, can't wait to read the rest of the book. the story is good. I have doubts about a few things but since there will new chapters to clear the doubt I will wait

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I can’t believe I struggled all the way to chapter 140 and literally is a different story from that point on. The grammar was already bad but why. you literally got rid of the story and added whatever after that point don’t waste your coins on this novel and this bozo

There are frequent grammatical and spelling errors throughout the book, however that isn't the worst part. After chapter 133 or so it drastically changes the story. Instead of fang Chen we get Jian. instead of the martial spirits cultivation system, we get the usual core formation and nascent soul cultivation system. It's like the author accidentally switched up projects and pasted the wrong book.

Don't read this novel, let alone read the unlocked chapters.. Because you will definitely regret it, because MC is 1000% slave of the system. Your brain will be damaged reading this 😆😆😆😆😆😆😆😆😁

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This is a good novel. Although it has some grammar error and typo, it is still understandable. This kind of concept is very few and I really like it.

The story is rather promising but please before you continue writing your chapters overwork your former ones. Correct wrong written words and your gramma.There are on mass of free online tools who would help you improve the quality.

for some reason, I can't remove this from my library... I tried to remove this novel, with one other, the other novel was deleted, but this one didn't get removed...