Bleach: New beginning. [Hiatus]

Hey guys it me the author. This is my first time ever writing something like this so this is a learning experience for me and I’d really like it if you gave me detailed criticism of you things you don’t like about the story. I really like writing so I’d like to improve on it as time goes on. I haven’t been uploading any stories as of late and it’s because I’m ill. Once I’m back to full health I’ll try to get as many chapters out for you guys. ~~Just another random author~~

this is the type of story that i always wanted...an SI...way way before cannon....but why the low rating?...dude dosnt have SI knowlede, he is just a random person [so yah its a bias review]...author man, could ya give MC SI knowledge?, it would be more interesting...like you could make up a BS reason where he just " suddenly remembers " suggestion: just the generic ****/.....OP smart MC,,,,,,but hides it...ruthless and cold, not some idiot that shows his power, one man army, no retarded perverted MC, add some romance and fluff, just build it, no shallow ****.....also since its 500 yrs before cannon...maybe make MC a kenpachi?....dude is before uruhara, yorochi, isshin..... zanpactou ability: yoru....creates a dark domain that is under MC's control...MC has ability to devour other abilities......MC also has wood style, like hashirama, can create forests, 1000 m tall mechs, wood giants and exploding dragons and ****..this could be shikai, the yoru could be bankai..... MC could use the wood style to go to the the hollow world and create a place for hollows?

I really enjoyed this story. Please keep up the good work. xD................................................................................................

This was a good listen while I mowed the grass with our tiny little trimmer! The story was engaging, the characters good. Some canon characters acted off model to push forward exposition but it was nothing egregious. By the end, an interesting potential conflict is set up but unfortunately, it's the mightiest cliffhanger possible as the story is dropped. Still, this is one of the better Bleach fics on here.

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Keep it up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$

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I like this story and intresting in a different point of view. Continue the story expecting more .-------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

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a pretty solid story that gives you what it promised fun to read and handles oc's in a way i wish more stories did the only complant i would have is the main charector is a little plain right now but that would probably change with time as he develops as a charector and the auther gets a more solid vision of what he wants him to become

A very good beginning and a competent narration _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________-

Your story is really good, plot is perfect startpoint and a guy that will work for his power instead of some op god that just powerful because the plot demands it is the signs of a trash story so your doing good things.